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Opinionacademic·2021

Some people believe that there will be no more fully human jobs in the future because of technological development. Do you agree or disagree?

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Step 1

IELTS ፈታኝ ምክሮች ለዚህ ርዕስ

1

State your clear position (agree or disagree) unequivocally in your introduction and ensure every body paragraph directly supports or subtly reinforces this stance. When acknowledging the opposing view, use a concessionary phrase like 'While it is undeniable that...' or 'Admittedly, there is some merit to the idea that...' followed immediately by a strong counter-argument that pivots back to your main thesis.

2

To argue against the premise, consider highlighting jobs requiring uniquely human attributes: for instance, roles demanding high emotional intelligence (e.g., therapists, nurses, teachers), complex creative problem-solving (e.g., R&D scientists, artists, entrepreneurs), or ethical decision-making (e.g., judges, policy makers). You could cite the growing demand for personalized care in aging societies like Japan or the need for innovative educators adapting to new learning paradigms.

3

The most common mistake is failing to define or exemplify 'fully human jobs' and instead discussing general job displacement. Avoid this by explicitly contrasting tasks that can be automated (e.g., repetitive manufacturing, data entry) with those requiring empathy, critical thinking, or artistic expression, thereby demonstrating a nuanced understanding of human versus machine capabilities.

4

For this opinion essay, employ a 'thesis-driven' linking strategy where each body paragraph's topic sentence clearly introduces a point supporting your overall agreement or disagreement. Use sophisticated cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore, it is imperative to consider...', 'Conversely, a strong argument can be made that...', or 'Consequently, the notion that...' to guide the reader through your logical progression of ideas.

5

Examiners look for a sophisticated and nuanced argument that avoids a simplistic 'yes/no' answer, even while maintaining a clear position. A band 8-9 response will demonstrate a deep understanding of the complexities of technological advancement and its impact on the workforce, using precise vocabulary, a wide range of grammatical structures (especially for concession and rebuttal), and a consistently coherent and cohesive development of ideas.

Step 2

የሚመከር የድርሰት አወቃቀር (Band 7+ ደረጃ)

1
መግቢያ

ወዲያውኑ ፈታኙን ትኩረት ስቦ አቋምህን አሳይ።

  • ጥያቄውን በጠንካራ ተመሳሳይ ቃላት ደግምው — ቃላቱን ቀጥተኛ አትቅዳ
  • አስተያየትህን በመጨረሻው ዓረፍተ ነገር ግልጽ አድርግ — ምንም ጥርጣሬ አይኑር
  • አጭር አድርገው፡ ከ2-3 ዓረፍተ ነገሮች አይበልጥ። እያንዳንዱ ቃል ዋጋ ሊኖረው ይገባል።

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

It is often argued that...There is a growing debate about whether...In my view, ... because ...
2
አካል አንቀጽ 1 — በጣም ጠንካራ ክርክርህ

በማይካድ ማስረጃ ጠንካራ ሙግት አቅርብ።

  • በኃይለኛ ርዕሰ ዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምር — ክርክርህን ደፍሮ ግለጽ
  • በተጨባጭ ማስረጃ ደግፍ፡ ስታቲስቲክስ፣ የገሃዱ ዓለም ምሳሌዎች፣ ወይም የባለሙያ ጥናት
  • ማስረጃህ ነጥብህን እንዴት እንደሚያረጋግጥ ግልጽ አድርግ — ፈታኙ ግንኙነቱን እንዲረዳ አገናኝ

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

The primary reason I hold this view is that...This is clearly illustrated by...For instance, in many countries...
3
አካል አንቀጽ 2 — ተጨማሪ ክርክር

አቋምህን ከሌላ አቅጣጫ ደግፍ።

  • የተለየ አቅጣጫ ምረጥ — አንቀጽ 1 ኢኮኖሚያዊ ከሆነ፣ ማህበራዊ፣ አካባቢያዊ ወይም ሥነ ምግባራዊ ሞክር
  • አዲስ ማስረጃ ተጠቀም — ተመሳሳይ ምሳሌ ወይም ምክንያት አትደግም
  • ከዋና ሃሳብህ ጋር ግልጽ አገናኝ — ይህ አጠቃላይ አቋምህን እንዴት እንደሚያጠናክር አሳይ

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

Furthermore, it is worth considering that...Another compelling argument is that...This is further supported by the fact that...
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ማጠቃለያ

በልበ ሙሉነት እና በሚታወስ ሃሳብ ጥሩ ስሜት ትተህ ጨርስ።

  • አዲስ ሃሳብ አታስገባ — ይህ የመጨረሻ ማጠቃለያህ ነው
  • አቋምህን ከመግቢያው የበለጠ ጠንካራ ቃላት ተጠቅሞ ድገምው
  • ኃይለኛ አድርገው፡ ከ2 ዓረፍተ ነገሮች አይበልጥ። በእምነት ጨርስ።

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

In conclusion, I firmly believe that...To sum up, the evidence clearly suggests that...

Step 3

ከፍተኛ ውጤት የሚያስገኙ ቃላት እና ሐረጎች

technological singularityA hypothetical future point in time when technological growth becomes uncontrollable and irreversible, resulting in unforeseeable changes to human civilization.
automation displacementThe process by which jobs previously performed by humans are taken over by machines or software.
human-centric rolesJobs that inherently require human qualities such as empathy, creativity, critical thinking, and complex interpersonal skills.
it is widely acknowledged thatA phrase used to introduce a generally accepted fact or belief.
a compelling argument can be madeUsed to introduce a strong and persuasive point.
this notion is predicated onIndicates that an idea or belief is based on a particular assumption or principle.
from my perspectiveClearly states the writer's personal viewpoint.
the evidence overwhelmingly suggestsUsed to introduce a conclusion strongly supported by data or observations.
notwithstandingIn spite of; despite.
this is not to say thatUsed to clarify a previous statement by indicating what is not being implied.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

ጭማሬ

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

ቅራኔ

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

ምክንያት / ውጤት

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

ምሳሌ

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

ስምምነት ወዳለ አቅጣጫ

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

የስምምነት ዓረፍተ ነገር

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

ከፍተኛ ሰዋሰዋዊ ቁጥጥር ያሳያል። 'Although' ብለህ ጀምር — ተቃራኒ ሃሳብ አምጣ፣ ከዚያ አቋምህን ግለጽ — ጥልቅ አስተሳሰብ ያሳያል።

ሁኔታዊ ዓረፍተ ነገር (Type 2)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

ለምናባዊ ሁኔታዎችና መፍትሔዎች ጥሩ ነው። 'If + past simple, would + infinitive' — ተለዋዋጭነት ያሳያል።

ለacademic ቃና Passive ተጠቀም

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

Academic writing passive ዓረፍተ ነገሮችን ይመርጣል። 'It is + past participle + that' — ስልጣናዊና ገለልተኛ ቃና ይሰጣል።

አንጻራዊ ዓረፍተ ነገር

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

ውስብስብ ሳይሆን ብቃትን ያሳያል። ለሰዎች 'who'፣ ለነገሮች 'which'፣ ለሁለቱም 'that' ተጠቀም።

ጥቅጥቅ ለማለት የስም ሐረግ

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

በጥቂት ቃላት ብዙ መረጃ ያስተላልፋል። 'The implementation of effective policies' እና 'policies are implemented effectively' ይወዳደሩ — Lexical Resource ውጤትን ያሻሽላል።

Step 6

Band 9 ናሙና መልስ (ሙሉ ምዘና)

ሙሉ ናሙና መልሱን እና የፈታኝ አስተያየቶችን ለማየት በነፃ ይመዝገቡ።

ሙሉ ናሙና መልስ ይመልከቱ — በነፃ ይመዝገቡ

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