Some believe that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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Step 1
IELTS ፈታኝ ምክሮች ለዚህ ርዕስ
Dedicate one full body paragraph to discussing the view that increasing sports facilities is the best way to improve public health, and another separate paragraph to the opposing view that other measures are more effective. Your personal opinion should be clearly stated and developed in the conclusion, ensuring you don't become too one-sided or dismiss one view prematurely in the body paragraphs.
For the 'sports facilities' view, you could argue they promote active lifestyles and community engagement, citing examples like Singapore's ActiveSG initiative or the widespread availability of local leisure centres in the UK. For 'other measures', consider preventative healthcare campaigns (e.g., Finland's dietary guidelines success), mental health support, or urban planning that encourages walking and cycling.
The most common mistake students make on this question is narrowing 'public health' to just 'physical fitness' or 'obesity'. Public health is a much broader concept encompassing mental well-being, disease prevention, and access to healthcare. Ensure your arguments for 'other measures' reflect this wider scope, perhaps by discussing mental health services or vaccination programs, not just diet and exercise.
To effectively transition between the two contrasting views, use clear linking phrases. After discussing the benefits of sports facilities, you could introduce the opposing perspective with phrases like 'Conversely, proponents of alternative strategies argue that...' or 'While the merits of increased sports infrastructure are clear, others contend that...'. This signals a shift in argument to the examiner.
For a band 8-9 answer, examiners look for a sophisticated understanding of the nuances of 'public health' and a balanced, well-developed discussion of both sides before a clear, consistent opinion. This includes using precise topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'sedentary lifestyles', 'preventative healthcare'), complex grammatical structures, and a logical progression of ideas that avoids oversimplification of the issue.
Step 2
የሚመከር የድርሰት አወቃቀር (Band 7+ ደረጃ)
1መግቢያ
ሁለቱን ወገኖች ፍትሃዊ በሆነ መንገድ አቅርቦ አቋምህን አሳይ።
- ሁለቱንም አመለካከቶች መረዳትህን አሳይ — ይህ ወሳኝ አስተሳሰብህን ያሳያል
- ወደ የት እንደምትደግፍ ግለጽ — ሁለቱን እኩል ብትዳስስም
- academic ቃና ጠብቅ — ስሜታዊ ቋንቋ ወይም አድልዎ ያስወግዱ
Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች
There are differing opinions on whether...While some people believe that..., others argue that...This essay will examine both perspectives before reaching a conclusion.2አካል አንቀጽ 1 — የመጀመሪያ አመለካከት
አንድ ወገን በአክብሮት እና በአሳማኝ መንገድ አቅርብ።
- ባትስማማም፣ ይህን አመለካከት በእውነተኛ ምሳሌ ቀጥተኛ አቅርብ
- academic የሪፖርት ቋንቋ ተጠቀም፡ 'Research indicates...', 'Studies show...', 'Experts argue...'
- ጠንካራ ነጥቦቹን አምን — ይህ ሚዛናዊ ትንተናህን ያሳያል እና ነጥብ ያስገኛል
Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች
On the one hand, supporters of this view argue that...Those in favour point out that...A key argument for this position is...3አካል አንቀጽ 2 — ተቃራኒ አመለካከት
የተቃራኒውን አስተያየት በተመሳሳይ ጥልቀትና ብቃት አቅርብ።
- የአንደኛውን አንቀጽ መዋቅርና ጥልቀት አዛምድ — መርማሪዎች ሁለቱን ያነጻጽራሉ
- እንደ 'Conversely'፣ 'In contrast'፣ 'On the other hand' ያሉ ተቃራኒ ማስተሳሰሪያ ቃላት ተጠቀም
- አስተያየት ካለህ ይህን አንቀጽ ትንሽ አጠናክር — ነገር ግን ፍትሃዊ ሁን
Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች
On the other hand, critics contend that...However, there is a strong counter-argument...Conversely, many people feel that...4ማጠቃለያ
ሁለቱን ሃሳቦች አጣምር፤ ወሳኝ ፍርድህን ግልጽ አድርግ።
- የሁለቱን ወገን ትክክለኛነት አምን — ይህ የአዕምሮ ብስለትህን ያሳያል
- ምርጫህን በግልጽና በእምነት ግለጽ — አትወዛወዝ
- ግልጽ አቋም ያዝ — መርማሪዎች ግልጽነትን ይሸልማሉ
Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች
In conclusion, while both sides have merit, I believe that...Having considered both arguments, it seems that...Step 3
ከፍተኛ ውጤት የሚያስገኙ ቃላት እና ሐረጎች
Step 4
Academic Phrases for This Essay Type
It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignoreጭማሬ
MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is moreቅራኔ
HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConverselyምክንያት / ውጤት
ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads toምሳሌ
For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch asስምምነት ወዳለ አቅጣጫ
AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedlyStep 5
Grammar Patterns for Band 7+
የስምምነት ዓረፍተ ነገር
Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.
ከፍተኛ ሰዋሰዋዊ ቁጥጥር ያሳያል። 'Although' ብለህ ጀምር — ተቃራኒ ሃሳብ አምጣ፣ ከዚያ አቋምህን ግለጽ — ጥልቅ አስተሳሰብ ያሳያል።
ሁኔታዊ ዓረፍተ ነገር (Type 2)
If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.
ለምናባዊ ሁኔታዎችና መፍትሔዎች ጥሩ ነው። 'If + past simple, would + infinitive' — ተለዋዋጭነት ያሳያል።
ለacademic ቃና Passive ተጠቀም
It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.
Academic writing passive ዓረፍተ ነገሮችን ይመርጣል። 'It is + past participle + that' — ስልጣናዊና ገለልተኛ ቃና ይሰጣል።
አንጻራዊ ዓረፍተ ነገር
Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.
ውስብስብ ሳይሆን ብቃትን ያሳያል። ለሰዎች 'who'፣ ለነገሮች 'which'፣ ለሁለቱም 'that' ተጠቀም።
ጥቅጥቅ ለማለት የስም ሐረግ
The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.
በጥቂት ቃላት ብዙ መረጃ ያስተላልፋል። 'The implementation of effective policies' እና 'policies are implemented effectively' ይወዳደሩ — Lexical Resource ውጤትን ያሻሽላል።
Step 6
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ሙሉ ናሙና መልሱን እና የፈታኝ አስተያየቶችን ለማየት በነፃ ይመዝገቡ።
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