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Some people think that governments should ban unhealthy foods and drinks that are high in sugar and fat. Others believe that people should have the freedom to choose what they eat. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Step 1

IELTS ፈታኝ ምክሮች ለዚህ ርዕስ

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Dedicate one full body paragraph to discussing the view that governments should ban unhealthy foods, and another distinct paragraph to the opposing view that people should have freedom of choice. Do not mix these arguments within the same paragraph or introduce your personal opinion until the conclusion, as this can lead to an unbalanced discussion and lower your Cohesion and Coherence score.

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When discussing the view for banning, you could reference the rising public health burden on national healthcare systems (e.g., the NHS in the UK) due to obesity and related diseases, or the specific example of countries like Singapore that have implemented sugar taxes or advertising bans on unhealthy drinks. For the freedom of choice argument, you might discuss the principle of personal autonomy, the potential for a 'nanny state' to overregulate citizens' lives, or the economic impact on food and beverage industries.

3

The most common mistake students make on this question is failing to give equal weight and development to both sides of the argument before presenting their own opinion. To avoid this, ensure you brainstorm 2-3 distinct points for each view and provide specific explanations or examples for each, rather than simply listing ideas. Maintain a neutral, objective tone in your body paragraphs.

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To transition effectively between the two opposing views, use clear linking phrases at the start of your body paragraphs. For instance, you could begin the first body paragraph with a phrase like 'On the one hand, proponents of governmental intervention argue that...' and then start the second body paragraph with 'Conversely, a strong counter-argument posits that individuals should retain the autonomy to...' This clearly signals the shift in perspective to the examiner.

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For a band 8-9 answer to this specific question, examiners look for a nuanced discussion that acknowledges the complexity of the issue, avoiding simplistic 'either/or' statements. This includes demonstrating a wide range of topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'sedentary lifestyles,' 'public health burden,' 'personal autonomy') and complex grammatical structures, while maintaining a clear, logical progression of ideas and a well-supported personal opinion in the conclusion.

Step 2

የሚመከር የድርሰት አወቃቀር (Band 7+ ደረጃ)

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መግቢያ

ሁለቱን ወገኖች ፍትሃዊ በሆነ መንገድ አቅርቦ አቋምህን አሳይ።

  • ሁለቱንም አመለካከቶች መረዳትህን አሳይ — ይህ ወሳኝ አስተሳሰብህን ያሳያል
  • ወደ የት እንደምትደግፍ ግለጽ — ሁለቱን እኩል ብትዳስስም
  • academic ቃና ጠብቅ — ስሜታዊ ቋንቋ ወይም አድልዎ ያስወግዱ

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

There are differing opinions on whether...While some people believe that..., others argue that...This essay will examine both perspectives before reaching a conclusion.
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አካል አንቀጽ 1 — የመጀመሪያ አመለካከት

አንድ ወገን በአክብሮት እና በአሳማኝ መንገድ አቅርብ።

  • ባትስማማም፣ ይህን አመለካከት በእውነተኛ ምሳሌ ቀጥተኛ አቅርብ
  • academic የሪፖርት ቋንቋ ተጠቀም፡ 'Research indicates...', 'Studies show...', 'Experts argue...'
  • ጠንካራ ነጥቦቹን አምን — ይህ ሚዛናዊ ትንተናህን ያሳያል እና ነጥብ ያስገኛል

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

On the one hand, supporters of this view argue that...Those in favour point out that...A key argument for this position is...
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አካል አንቀጽ 2 — ተቃራኒ አመለካከት

የተቃራኒውን አስተያየት በተመሳሳይ ጥልቀትና ብቃት አቅርብ።

  • የአንደኛውን አንቀጽ መዋቅርና ጥልቀት አዛምድ — መርማሪዎች ሁለቱን ያነጻጽራሉ
  • እንደ 'Conversely'፣ 'In contrast'፣ 'On the other hand' ያሉ ተቃራኒ ማስተሳሰሪያ ቃላት ተጠቀም
  • አስተያየት ካለህ ይህን አንቀጽ ትንሽ አጠናክር — ነገር ግን ፍትሃዊ ሁን

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

On the other hand, critics contend that...However, there is a strong counter-argument...Conversely, many people feel that...
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ማጠቃለያ

ሁለቱን ሃሳቦች አጣምር፤ ወሳኝ ፍርድህን ግልጽ አድርግ።

  • የሁለቱን ወገን ትክክለኛነት አምን — ይህ የአዕምሮ ብስለትህን ያሳያል
  • ምርጫህን በግልጽና በእምነት ግለጽ — አትወዛወዝ
  • ግልጽ አቋም ያዝ — መርማሪዎች ግልጽነትን ይሸልማሉ

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

In conclusion, while both sides have merit, I believe that...Having considered both arguments, it seems that...

Step 3

ከፍተኛ ውጤት የሚያስገኙ ቃላት እና ሐረጎች

sedentary lifestyleA lifestyle characterized by much sitting and little regular physical activity.
public health burdenThe strain or cost placed on a society's healthcare system and resources due to widespread health issues.
dietary choicesThe decisions individuals make about what foods and drinks they consume.
it is widely acknowledged thatA phrase used to introduce a generally accepted fact or belief.
a compelling argument can be madeA phrase used to introduce a strong and persuasive point.
this notion is predicated onThis idea is based on or depends on.
from my perspectiveA phrase used to introduce one's personal opinion or viewpoint.
the evidence overwhelmingly suggestsA phrase indicating that there is a vast amount of data supporting a particular conclusion.
notwithstandingDespite; in spite of.
it could be argued thatA phrase used to present a possible argument or interpretation, often to introduce a counter-point or a nuanced perspective.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

ጭማሬ

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

ቅራኔ

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

ምክንያት / ውጤት

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

ምሳሌ

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

ስምምነት ወዳለ አቅጣጫ

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

የስምምነት ዓረፍተ ነገር

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

ከፍተኛ ሰዋሰዋዊ ቁጥጥር ያሳያል። 'Although' ብለህ ጀምር — ተቃራኒ ሃሳብ አምጣ፣ ከዚያ አቋምህን ግለጽ — ጥልቅ አስተሳሰብ ያሳያል።

ሁኔታዊ ዓረፍተ ነገር (Type 2)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

ለምናባዊ ሁኔታዎችና መፍትሔዎች ጥሩ ነው። 'If + past simple, would + infinitive' — ተለዋዋጭነት ያሳያል።

ለacademic ቃና Passive ተጠቀም

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

Academic writing passive ዓረፍተ ነገሮችን ይመርጣል። 'It is + past participle + that' — ስልጣናዊና ገለልተኛ ቃና ይሰጣል።

አንጻራዊ ዓረፍተ ነገር

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

ውስብስብ ሳይሆን ብቃትን ያሳያል። ለሰዎች 'who'፣ ለነገሮች 'which'፣ ለሁለቱም 'that' ተጠቀም።

ጥቅጥቅ ለማለት የስም ሐረግ

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

በጥቂት ቃላት ብዙ መረጃ ያስተላልፋል። 'The implementation of effective policies' እና 'policies are implemented effectively' ይወዳደሩ — Lexical Resource ውጤትን ያሻሽላል።

Step 6

Band 9 ናሙና መልስ (ሙሉ ምዘና)

ሙሉ ናሙና መልሱን እና የፈታኝ አስተያየቶችን ለማየት በነፃ ይመዝገቡ።

ሙሉ ናሙና መልስ ይመልከቱ — በነፃ ይመዝገቡ

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