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Opinionacademic·2025

Some people believe that young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way as adults. Do you agree or disagree?

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Step 1

このトピックに関するIELTS 試験官のアドバイス

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When tackling this opinion essay, establish your stance (agree or disagree) unequivocally in your introduction, for instance, by stating, 'I firmly disagree with the notion...' or 'I strongly concur that...'. While acknowledging the opposing viewpoint in a body paragraph, frame it as a perspective that ultimately lacks sufficient merit compared to your own, using phrases like 'While some may argue that...' followed immediately by a counter-argument or stronger evidence supporting your main position.

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Consider arguing that adolescent brain development, particularly the prefrontal cortex responsible for impulse control and future planning, is not fully mature until the mid-20s, which diminishes culpability compared to adults. Alternatively, you could highlight the success of rehabilitative juvenile justice systems in countries like Norway or Germany, which focus on reintegration and education rather than purely punitive measures, leading to lower recidivism rates.

3

The most common mistake on this question is failing to maintain an academic tone, often by becoming overly emotional or simply listing reasons without developing them into coherent arguments. Avoid getting sidetracked into discussing the *causes* of youth crime; instead, focus strictly on the *punishment* aspect and whether it should mirror adult sentencing, ensuring every point directly addresses this core dilemma.

4

To transition effectively in this opinion essay, use a 'concession and refutation' strategy. Start a paragraph by acknowledging a valid point from the opposing side (e.g., 'It is undeniable that serious crimes warrant severe consequences...'), then immediately pivot to your main argument by introducing a contrasting idea (e.g., 'However, this does not negate the crucial distinction in the developmental stage of young offenders...'). This demonstrates nuanced thinking and strengthens your own position.

5

For a band 8-9 answer, examiners look for a sophisticated understanding of the complexities involved, such as the interplay between justice, rehabilitation, and developmental psychology. Your essay should present a well-reasoned, consistent argument supported by specific, relevant examples or logical deductions, demonstrating precise academic vocabulary related to criminology and justice, and showcasing excellent control over complex grammatical structures.

Step 2

推奨エッセイ構成(Band 7+ スタンダード)

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イントロダクション

採点官の興味を引き、すぐに自分の立場を明確に示しましょう。

  • 強力な類義語を使って質問を言い換える — 言葉をそのままコピーしない
  • 最終文で自分の意見を明確に述べる — 疑いの余地を残さない
  • 簡潔に:最大2〜3文。すべての単語に意味を持たせる。

各パラグラフのBand 7+ センテンススターター

It is often argued that...There is a growing debate about whether...In my view, ... because ...
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ボディパラグラフ1 — 最強の論点

反論の余地のない証拠で、最も説得力のある主張を行う。

  • 力強いトピックセンテンスで始める — 自分の主張を大胆に述べる
  • 具体的な証拠(統計、実例、専門家の研究)で裏付ける
  • 証拠がどのように自分の主張を証明するのかを正確に説明する — 採点官に筋道を示す

各パラグラフのBand 7+ センテンススターター

The primary reason I hold this view is that...This is clearly illustrated by...For instance, in many countries...
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ボディパラグラフ2 — 補足的な論点

補完的な視点で自分の立場を強化する。

  • 異なる角度を選ぶ — パラグラフ1が経済的なら、社会的、環境的、倫理的視点を試す
  • 新しい証拠を使う — 同じ例や論理を繰り返さない
  • 自分の主張に明示的に結びつける — これが全体の立場をどのように強化するかを示す

各パラグラフのBand 7+ センテンススターター

Furthermore, it is worth considering that...Another compelling argument is that...This is further supported by the fact that...
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結論

自信に満ちた印象的な結びで、長く記憶に残る印象を与える。

  • 新しいアイデアを導入しない — これは最終的な要約である
  • イントロダクションよりも強い語彙を使って自分の立場を再提示する
  • 力強く:最大2文。権威を持って締めくくる。

各パラグラフのBand 7+ センテンススターター

In conclusion, I firmly believe that...To sum up, the evidence clearly suggests that...

Step 3

高得点につながる語彙・コロケーション

juvenile justice systemA system of courts and related institutions designed to handle criminal offenses committed by minors.
rehabilitative approachA method of dealing with offenders that focuses on their reintegration into society and addressing the root causes of their behavior.
diminished responsibilityA legal concept where a person's culpability for a crime is reduced due to mental impairment or developmental immaturity.
it is widely acknowledged thatA phrase used to introduce a generally accepted fact or common understanding.
a compelling argument can be madeA phrase used to introduce a strong and persuasive reason or point of view.
this notion is predicated onA phrase indicating that an idea or belief is based upon a particular principle or assumption.
from my perspectiveA phrase used to introduce one's personal opinion or viewpoint.
the evidence overwhelmingly suggestsA phrase indicating that a large amount of data or information points strongly towards a particular conclusion.
notwithstandingDespite; in spite of.
it could be argued thatA phrase used to introduce a possible point of view or contention, often to present a counter-argument or a nuanced perspective.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

追加

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

対比

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

原因 / 結果

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

例示

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

譲歩

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

譲歩を含む複文

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

高度な文法コントロールを示します。「Although/While」+ 反対の見解で始め、自分の立場を述べる — ニュアンスのある思考を示します。

条件法(タイプ2)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

仮想的なシナリオや解決策に最適です。構造:「If + 過去形, would + 不定詞」 — 柔軟性と想像力を示します。

academicのための受動態

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

Academic writingは受動構文を好みます。「It is + 過去分詞 + that」は権威的で客観的なトーンを作ります。

関係節

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

複雑さを増さずに洗練さを加えます。「who」は人、「which」は物、「that」はどちらにも使います。

密度のための名詞句

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

より多くの情報を少ない言葉に詰め込みます。「効果的な政策の実施」対「政策は効果的に実施される」 — Lexical Resourceスコアを向上させます。

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