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Some people believe that children should be taught to be competitive in school. Others, however, say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

कम्तिमा २५० शब्द लेख्नुहोस्। तपाईंले यो कार्यमा लगभग ४० मिनेट बिताउनु पर्छ।

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Step 1

यस विषयको लागि परीक्षक सुझावहरू

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Dedicate one full body paragraph to thoroughly explore the arguments for teaching competitiveness, and a separate, equally developed paragraph for the arguments supporting cooperation. Your personal opinion should only be presented in the conclusion, ensuring a balanced discussion throughout the main body. Avoid the common pitfall of being overly biased towards one side too early in the essay.

2

For competitiveness, you could reference how a meritocratic system prepares students for a competitive global job market, citing examples like the rigorous academic environments in East Asian countries or the drive for innovation seen in Silicon Valley. For cooperation, consider discussing the success of project-based learning models in Scandinavian education systems, which foster teamwork and emotional intelligence, or the importance of collaborative problem-solving in modern workplaces.

3

The most common mistake on this question is failing to provide specific, well-developed examples or arguments for *both* sides, often resorting to vague generalisations. To avoid this, ensure each body paragraph contains at least two distinct, elaborated points supported by clear reasoning or a named example, demonstrating a nuanced understanding of both competition and collaboration in an educational context.

4

Employ clear transition phrases to signal the shift between opposing viewpoints. For instance, after discussing competition, you could transition with phrases like "Conversely, proponents of collaborative learning contend that..." or "While the benefits of a competitive environment are clear, an alternative perspective highlights the importance of...". This ensures a smooth flow and logical progression between the contrasting arguments.

5

Examiners look for a nuanced discussion that acknowledges the complexities of both competitive and cooperative learning, rather than a simplistic 'either/or' approach. A band 8-9 answer will demonstrate sophisticated vocabulary related to pedagogy and social dynamics, present well-reasoned arguments for both sides, and offer a clear, well-supported opinion in the conclusion that synthesizes the preceding discussion, perhaps suggesting a balanced approach.

Step 2

सिफारिस गरिएको अनुच्छेद संरचना

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परिचय

बहसका दुवै पक्षको परिचय दिनुहोस् र कुन पक्षमाथि छलफल गर्नुहुनेछ भनी बताउनुहोस्।

  • तपाईंले दुवै दृष्टिकोण बुझ्नुभएको छ भनी परीक्षकलाई देखाउनुहोस्।
  • वैकल्पिक रूपमा तपाईं कुन पक्षमा झुक्नुहुन्छ भनी बताउनुहोस्।
  • यसलाई तटस्थ र सन्तुलित स्वरमा राख्नुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

There are differing opinions on whether...While some people believe that..., others argue that...This essay will examine both perspectives before reaching a conclusion.
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मुख्य अनुच्छेद १ — पहिलो दृष्टिकोण

तर्कको एउटा पक्षलाई प्रमाणसहित निष्पक्ष रूपमा प्रस्तुत गर्नुहोस्।

  • तपाईं असहमत भए पनि, यो विचारलाई सम्मानपूर्वक र वास्तविक उदाहरणका साथ प्रस्तुत गर्नुहोस्।
  • रिपोर्टिङ भाषा प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्: 'Some argue...', 'Proponents suggest...'
  • यस दृष्टिकोणको बललाई स्वीकार गरेर अन्त्य गर्नुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

On the one hand, supporters of this view argue that...Those in favour point out that...A key argument for this position is...
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मुख्य अनुच्छेद २ — विपरीत दृष्टिकोण

अर्को पक्षलाई समान गहिराइ र प्रमाणका साथ प्रस्तुत गर्नुहोस्।

  • सन्तुलनको लागि अनुच्छेद १ को संरचनालाई प्रतिबिम्बित गर्नुहोस्।
  • परिवर्तन सङ्केत गर्न विपरीत लिङ्किङ शब्दहरू प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्।
  • यदि तपाईंसँग कुनै राय छ भने, यो अनुच्छेद अलि बलियो हुन सक्छ।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

On the other hand, critics contend that...However, there is a strong counter-argument...Conversely, many people feel that...
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निष्कर्ष

दुवै विचारहरूलाई सङ्क्षेपीकरण गर्नुहोस् र (यदि सोधियो भने) आफ्नो राय दिनुहोस्।

  • दुवै पक्षको वैधतालाई स्वीकार गर्नुहोस्।
  • यदि प्रश्नले 'give your opinion' सोध्छ भने आफ्नो प्राथमिकता स्पष्ट रूपमा बताउनुहोस्।
  • कहिले पनि पूर्ण रूपमा तटस्थ नबस्नुहोस् — एउटा पक्ष लिनुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

In conclusion, while both sides have merit, I believe that...Having considered both arguments, it seems that...

Step 3

मुख्य शब्दावली

pedagogical approachesMethods and strategies used in teaching and education.
holistic developmentThe process of nurturing a student's intellectual, emotional, social, and physical growth.
meritocratic systemA social system in which advancement is based on individual ability or achievement, rather than on wealth or social status.
it is widely acknowledged thatA phrase used to introduce a commonly accepted belief or fact.
a compelling argument can be madeA strong and convincing point or case can be presented.
this notion is predicated onThis idea or concept is based or founded upon.
from my perspectiveIn my opinion or viewpoint.
the evidence overwhelmingly suggestsThe available facts or information strongly indicate.
notwithstandingDespite; in spite of.
it could be argued thatA phrase used to introduce a possible point of view or contention.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

थप

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

विपरीत

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

कारण / प्रभाव

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

उदाहरण

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

छुट

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

सहुलियत सहितको जटिल वाक्य

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

तपाईंले अधीनस्थ खण्डहरूलाई कसरी सम्हाल्न सक्नुहुन्छ भनी परीक्षकलाई देखाउँछ। 'Although/While' + विपरीत दृष्टिकोणबाट सुरु गर्नुहोस्, त्यसपछि आफ्नो दृष्टिकोण बताउनुहोस्।

सशर्त (प्रकार २)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

काल्पनिक तर्क र समाधानहरूको लागि उत्तम। 'If + past simple, would + infinitive'।

शैक्षिक स्वरका लागि निष्क्रिय

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

शैक्षिक लेखनमा निष्क्रिय संरचनाहरूलाई प्राथमिकता दिइन्छ। 'It is + past participle + that' ले आधिकारिकता झल्काउँछ।

सापेक्ष खण्ड

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

सापेक्ष खण्डहरूले नयाँ वाक्य सुरु नगरी विवरणहरू थप्छन्। मानिसहरूका लागि 'who', वस्तुहरूका लागि 'which' प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्।

घनत्वको लागि संज्ञा वाक्यांश

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

धेरै छोटो वाक्यहरू प्रयोग गर्नुको सट्टा संज्ञा वाक्यांशहरूमा जानकारी प्याक गर्नुहोस्। यसले तपाईंको Lexical Resource स्कोर बढाउँछ।

Step 6

मोडेल उत्तर

यस विषयको लागि पूर्ण मोडेल उत्तर पढ्न नि:शुल्क साइन अप गर्नुहोस्।

मोडेल उत्तर पढ्न साइन अप गर्नुहोस्

कागजमा अभ्यास गर्नुहोस्

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