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Prison is not a cure for crime. Society should try other forms of punishment instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

कम्तिमा २५० शब्द लेख्नुहोस्। तपाईंले यो कार्यमा लगभग ४० मिनेट बिताउनु पर्छ।

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Step 1

यस विषयको लागि परीक्षक सुझावहरू

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For this 'To what extent' question, explicitly state your degree of agreement or disagreement in the introduction (e.g., 'I strongly agree that prison is ineffective as a cure'). While acknowledging the rehabilitative potential of prisons in one sentence, immediately pivot to defending why alternative punishments are superior, ensuring your main body paragraphs consistently support your primary stance without wavering.

2

Consider arguments such as the high recidivism rates associated with traditional incarceration, suggesting its failure to rehabilitate. You could cite examples like Norway's penal system, which prioritizes restorative justice and rehabilitation over punishment, leading to significantly lower reoffending rates compared to more punitive systems like those in the US. Another point could be the economic burden of prisons, arguing that funds could be better allocated to community-based rehabilitation programs or educational initiatives.

3

The most common mistake students make is discussing the problems with prisons and the benefits of alternatives in isolation, without directly linking them to the core idea of 'cure for crime' and the 'instead' aspect. To avoid this, ensure your essay consistently compares and contrasts the effectiveness of traditional incarceration versus alternative punishments in *curing* or *reducing* crime, explicitly arguing why one approach is superior in achieving genuine societal benefit.

4

To transition effectively between discussing the limitations of prisons and advocating for alternatives, use clear contrasting phrases. For example, after a paragraph detailing prison's shortcomings, you could begin the next with, 'Conversely, a strong case can be made for alternative forms of punishment...' or 'In stark contrast to punitive incarceration, restorative justice initiatives offer a more promising path...' This signals a clear shift in your argument while maintaining coherence.

5

For a band 8-9, examiners look for a nuanced understanding that critically evaluates *why* prison often fails as a 'cure' (e.g., fostering criminal networks, social stigma upon release) and *how* specific alternatives directly address these failures, demonstrating a sophisticated grasp of sociological and economic factors. High-scoring essays will use precise, academic vocabulary related to criminology and social justice, presenting a well-developed, logically coherent argument with clear progression and a strong authorial voice.

Step 2

सिफारिस गरिएको अनुच्छेद संरचना

1
परिचय

प्रश्नलाई पुन: लेख्नुहोस् र तपाईंको स्थिति स्पष्ट रूपमा बताउनुहोस्।

  • प्रश्नलाई शब्दशः कहिल्यै नक्कल नगर्नुहोस् — पर्यायवाची शब्दहरू प्रयोग गरेर पुन: लेख्नुहोस्
  • परिचयको अन्तिम वाक्यमा आफ्नो राय व्यक्त गर्नुहोस्।
  • यसलाई अधिकतम २-३ वाक्यमा राख्नुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

It is often argued that...There is a growing debate about whether...In my view, ... because ...
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मुख्य अनुच्छेद १ — मुख्य तर्क

एक विशिष्ट उदाहरण सहित आफ्नो सबैभन्दा बलियो तर्क प्रस्तुत गर्नुहोस्।

  • तर्क प्रस्तुत गर्ने स्पष्ट विषय वाक्यबाट सुरु गर्नुहोस्।
  • कुनै खास उदाहरण, तथ्याङ्क, वा वास्तविक-विश्वको घटनाद्वारा समर्थन गर्नुहोस्।
  • यो उदाहरणले तपाईंको कुरालाई किन समर्थन गर्छ व्याख्या गर्नुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

The primary reason I hold this view is that...This is clearly illustrated by...For instance, in many countries...
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मुख्य अनुच्छेद २ — समर्थन तर्क

तपाईंको स्थितिलाई फरक कोणबाट बलियो बनाउने दोस्रो तर्क थप्नुहोस्।

  • एउटा फरक कोण छनौट गर्नुहोस् — यदि अनुच्छेद १ आर्थिक थियो भने, सामाजिक वा वातावरणीय प्रयास गर्नुहोस्।
  • विभिन्न प्रकारका प्रमाणहरू (व्यक्तिगत अवलोकन, अनुसन्धान, तर्क) प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्।
  • तपाईंको थेसिसमा फर्कनुहोस्

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

Furthermore, it is worth considering that...Another compelling argument is that...This is further supported by the fact that...
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निष्कर्ष

तपाईंको रायलाई पुनः बताउनुहोस् र तपाईंको मुख्य तर्कहरूलाई सङ्क्षेपीकरण गर्नुहोस्।

  • निष्कर्षमा नयाँ विचारहरू नल्याउनुहोस्।
  • परिचयमा प्रयोग गरिएका शब्दहरूभन्दा फरक शब्दहरू प्रयोग गरेर आफ्नो स्थिति पुन: बताउनुहोस्।
  • यसलाई २ वाक्यमा राख्नुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

In conclusion, I firmly believe that...To sum up, the evidence clearly suggests that...

Step 3

मुख्य शब्दावली

Recidivism rateThe tendency of a convicted criminal to reoffend after release.
Restorative justiceAn approach to justice focusing on the rehabilitation of offenders through reconciliation with victims and the community.
Penal systemThe system of laws, courts, and prisons used to punish people who commit crimes.
It is widely acknowledged thatA common phrase used to introduce a generally accepted fact or belief.
A compelling argument can be madeA phrase used to introduce a strong and persuasive point.
This notion is predicated onThis idea or belief is based on or depends on a particular principle or assumption.
From my perspectiveA phrase used to introduce one's personal opinion or viewpoint.
The evidence overwhelmingly suggestsA phrase used to indicate that there is a large amount of strong proof supporting a particular point.
NotwithstandingDespite; in spite of.
This is not to say thatA phrase used to clarify that a previous statement does not imply something else, often to avoid misinterpretation.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

थप

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

विपरीत

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

कारण / प्रभाव

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

उदाहरण

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

छुट

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

सहुलियत सहितको जटिल वाक्य

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

तपाईंले अधीनस्थ खण्डहरूलाई कसरी सम्हाल्न सक्नुहुन्छ भनी परीक्षकलाई देखाउँछ। 'Although/While' + विपरीत दृष्टिकोणबाट सुरु गर्नुहोस्, त्यसपछि आफ्नो दृष्टिकोण बताउनुहोस्।

सशर्त (प्रकार २)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

काल्पनिक तर्क र समाधानहरूको लागि उत्तम। 'If + past simple, would + infinitive'।

शैक्षिक स्वरका लागि निष्क्रिय

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

शैक्षिक लेखनमा निष्क्रिय संरचनाहरूलाई प्राथमिकता दिइन्छ। 'It is + past participle + that' ले आधिकारिकता झल्काउँछ।

सापेक्ष खण्ड

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

सापेक्ष खण्डहरूले नयाँ वाक्य सुरु नगरी विवरणहरू थप्छन्। मानिसहरूका लागि 'who', वस्तुहरूका लागि 'which' प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्।

घनत्वको लागि संज्ञा वाक्यांश

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

धेरै छोटो वाक्यहरू प्रयोग गर्नुको सट्टा संज्ञा वाक्यांशहरूमा जानकारी प्याक गर्नुहोस्। यसले तपाईंको Lexical Resource स्कोर बढाउँछ।

Step 6

मोडेल उत्तर

यस विषयको लागि पूर्ण मोडेल उत्तर पढ्न नि:शुल्क साइन अप गर्नुहोस्।

मोडेल उत्तर पढ्न साइन अप गर्नुहोस्

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