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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

कम्तिमा २५० शब्द लेख्नुहोस्। तपाईंले यो कार्यमा लगभग ४० मिनेट बिताउनु पर्छ।

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Step 1

यस विषयको लागि परीक्षक सुझावहरू

1

Dedicate one full body paragraph to discussing the arguments for longer prison sentences, and a separate, equally developed paragraph to exploring alternative crime reduction methods. Avoid presenting only one side strongly, as this will undermine your ability to 'discuss both views' comprehensively and could lead to a lower score for Task Response.

2

When discussing longer sentences, you could mention the concept of 'deterrence' and 'incapacitation' (e.g., the strict legal systems in countries like Singapore). For alternative methods, consider 'rehabilitative programs' (e.g., Norway's focus on restorative justice) or 'addressing root causes' such as poverty, lack of education, and unemployment.

3

A common mistake students make is simply listing alternatives without explaining *how* they reduce crime, or merely stating that longer sentences deter criminals without elaborating on the mechanism. To avoid this, ensure each point is followed by a clear explanation of its impact on crime rates, demonstrating a deeper understanding of the issue.

4

To effectively transition between the two opposing views, use contrastive linking phrases at the beginning of your second body paragraph. Phrases like 'However, an alternative perspective posits that...' or 'Conversely, proponents of different strategies argue that...' clearly signal a shift in focus while maintaining coherence.

5

Examiners look for a nuanced discussion that critically evaluates the merits and drawbacks of both approaches, rather than just describing them. A band 8-9 response will demonstrate a sophisticated understanding of the complexities of crime reduction, using precise academic vocabulary related to criminology and social policy, and presenting a well-supported, clear personal opinion.

Step 2

सिफारिस गरिएको अनुच्छेद संरचना

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परिचय

बहसका दुवै पक्षको परिचय दिनुहोस् र कुन पक्षमाथि छलफल गर्नुहुनेछ भनी बताउनुहोस्।

  • तपाईंले दुवै दृष्टिकोण बुझ्नुभएको छ भनी परीक्षकलाई देखाउनुहोस्।
  • वैकल्पिक रूपमा तपाईं कुन पक्षमा झुक्नुहुन्छ भनी बताउनुहोस्।
  • यसलाई तटस्थ र सन्तुलित स्वरमा राख्नुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

There are differing opinions on whether...While some people believe that..., others argue that...This essay will examine both perspectives before reaching a conclusion.
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मुख्य अनुच्छेद १ — पहिलो दृष्टिकोण

तर्कको एउटा पक्षलाई प्रमाणसहित निष्पक्ष रूपमा प्रस्तुत गर्नुहोस्।

  • तपाईं असहमत भए पनि, यो विचारलाई सम्मानपूर्वक र वास्तविक उदाहरणका साथ प्रस्तुत गर्नुहोस्।
  • रिपोर्टिङ भाषा प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्: 'Some argue...', 'Proponents suggest...'
  • यस दृष्टिकोणको बललाई स्वीकार गरेर अन्त्य गर्नुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

On the one hand, supporters of this view argue that...Those in favour point out that...A key argument for this position is...
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मुख्य अनुच्छेद २ — विपरीत दृष्टिकोण

अर्को पक्षलाई समान गहिराइ र प्रमाणका साथ प्रस्तुत गर्नुहोस्।

  • सन्तुलनको लागि अनुच्छेद १ को संरचनालाई प्रतिबिम्बित गर्नुहोस्।
  • परिवर्तन सङ्केत गर्न विपरीत लिङ्किङ शब्दहरू प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्।
  • यदि तपाईंसँग कुनै राय छ भने, यो अनुच्छेद अलि बलियो हुन सक्छ।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

On the other hand, critics contend that...However, there is a strong counter-argument...Conversely, many people feel that...
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निष्कर्ष

दुवै विचारहरूलाई सङ्क्षेपीकरण गर्नुहोस् र (यदि सोधियो भने) आफ्नो राय दिनुहोस्।

  • दुवै पक्षको वैधतालाई स्वीकार गर्नुहोस्।
  • यदि प्रश्नले 'give your opinion' सोध्छ भने आफ्नो प्राथमिकता स्पष्ट रूपमा बताउनुहोस्।
  • कहिले पनि पूर्ण रूपमा तटस्थ नबस्नुहोस् — एउटा पक्ष लिनुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

In conclusion, while both sides have merit, I believe that...Having considered both arguments, it seems that...

Step 3

मुख्य शब्दावली

deterrent effectThe power of a punishment or threat to discourage someone from committing a crime.
rehabilitative programsStructured activities or treatments designed to help criminals change their behavior and reintegrate into society.
recidivism ratesThe percentage of former prisoners who are rearrested or reconvicted for a new crime within a certain period after release.
it is widely acknowledged thatA phrase used to introduce a generally accepted fact or belief.
a compelling argument can be madeA phrase used to introduce a strong and convincing point or reason.
this notion is predicated onThis idea or concept is based on or depends on a particular assumption or principle.
from my perspectiveA phrase used to introduce one's personal opinion or viewpoint.
the evidence overwhelmingly suggestsA phrase used to indicate that there is a large amount of data or information supporting a particular conclusion.
notwithstandingDespite; in spite of.
it could be argued thatA phrase used to introduce a possible argument or point of view, often to present a nuanced or less definitive statement.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

थप

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

विपरीत

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

कारण / प्रभाव

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

उदाहरण

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

छुट

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

सहुलियत सहितको जटिल वाक्य

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

तपाईंले अधीनस्थ खण्डहरूलाई कसरी सम्हाल्न सक्नुहुन्छ भनी परीक्षकलाई देखाउँछ। 'Although/While' + विपरीत दृष्टिकोणबाट सुरु गर्नुहोस्, त्यसपछि आफ्नो दृष्टिकोण बताउनुहोस्।

सशर्त (प्रकार २)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

काल्पनिक तर्क र समाधानहरूको लागि उत्तम। 'If + past simple, would + infinitive'।

शैक्षिक स्वरका लागि निष्क्रिय

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

शैक्षिक लेखनमा निष्क्रिय संरचनाहरूलाई प्राथमिकता दिइन्छ। 'It is + past participle + that' ले आधिकारिकता झल्काउँछ।

सापेक्ष खण्ड

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

सापेक्ष खण्डहरूले नयाँ वाक्य सुरु नगरी विवरणहरू थप्छन्। मानिसहरूका लागि 'who', वस्तुहरूका लागि 'which' प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्।

घनत्वको लागि संज्ञा वाक्यांश

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

धेरै छोटो वाक्यहरू प्रयोग गर्नुको सट्टा संज्ञा वाक्यांशहरूमा जानकारी प्याक गर्नुहोस्। यसले तपाईंको Lexical Resource स्कोर बढाउँछ।

Step 6

मोडेल उत्तर

यस विषयको लागि पूर्ण मोडेल उत्तर पढ्न नि:शुल्क साइन अप गर्नुहोस्।

मोडेल उत्तर पढ्न साइन अप गर्नुहोस्

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