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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Step 1

考官针对本话题的评分要点

1

Dedicate one full body paragraph to discussing the arguments for longer prison sentences, and a separate, equally developed paragraph to exploring alternative crime reduction methods. Avoid presenting only one side strongly, as this will undermine your ability to 'discuss both views' comprehensively and could lead to a lower score for Task Response.

2

When discussing longer sentences, you could mention the concept of 'deterrence' and 'incapacitation' (e.g., the strict legal systems in countries like Singapore). For alternative methods, consider 'rehabilitative programs' (e.g., Norway's focus on restorative justice) or 'addressing root causes' such as poverty, lack of education, and unemployment.

3

A common mistake students make is simply listing alternatives without explaining *how* they reduce crime, or merely stating that longer sentences deter criminals without elaborating on the mechanism. To avoid this, ensure each point is followed by a clear explanation of its impact on crime rates, demonstrating a deeper understanding of the issue.

4

To effectively transition between the two opposing views, use contrastive linking phrases at the beginning of your second body paragraph. Phrases like 'However, an alternative perspective posits that...' or 'Conversely, proponents of different strategies argue that...' clearly signal a shift in focus while maintaining coherence.

5

Examiners look for a nuanced discussion that critically evaluates the merits and drawbacks of both approaches, rather than just describing them. A band 8-9 response will demonstrate a sophisticated understanding of the complexities of crime reduction, using precise academic vocabulary related to criminology and social policy, and presenting a well-supported, clear personal opinion.

Step 2

推荐的文章结构(25+分标准)

1
引言

通过公正呈现双方观点并确立自身立场来展现掌控力。

  • 展示对两种视角的理解——这体现批判性思维
  • 说明你倾向于哪一方——即使你在平等讨论双方
  • 保持中立、客观的语气——避免情绪化语言或偏见

task 各段落万能开头句

There are differing opinions on whether...While some people believe that..., others argue that...This essay will examine both perspectives before reaching a conclusion.
2
主体段落1——第一种观点

以尊重和可信的方式呈现一方观点。

  • 即使你不同意,也要用真实例子如实呈现这一观点
  • 使用客观的转述语言:'研究表明...'、'数据显示...'、'专家认为...'
  • 承认其优点——这体现平衡分析并赢得分数

task 各段落万能开头句

On the one hand, supporters of this view argue that...Those in favour point out that...A key argument for this position is...
3
主体段落2——对立观点

以同等深度和复杂度呈现反方观点。

  • 匹配第一段的结构与深度——考官会对比两者
  • 使用对比性过渡词:'相反地'、'相比之下'、'另一方面'
  • 如果你有个人观点,让此段落稍强一些——但保持公正

task 各段落万能开头句

On the other hand, critics contend that...However, there is a strong counter-argument...Conversely, many people feel that...
4
结论

综合双方观点并给出你的决定性判断。

  • 承认双方观点的合理性——这体现思维成熟度
  • 清晰自信地陈述你的倾向——不要含糊其辞
  • 采取坚定立场——考官更青睐清晰而非模棱两可

task 各段落万能开头句

In conclusion, while both sides have merit, I believe that...Having considered both arguments, it seems that...

Step 3

高分词汇与搭配

deterrent effectThe power of a punishment or threat to discourage someone from committing a crime.
rehabilitative programsStructured activities or treatments designed to help criminals change their behavior and reintegrate into society.
recidivism ratesThe percentage of former prisoners who are rearrested or reconvicted for a new crime within a certain period after release.
it is widely acknowledged thatA phrase used to introduce a generally accepted fact or belief.
a compelling argument can be madeA phrase used to introduce a strong and convincing point or reason.
this notion is predicated onThis idea or concept is based on or depends on a particular assumption or principle.
from my perspectiveA phrase used to introduce one's personal opinion or viewpoint.
the evidence overwhelmingly suggestsA phrase used to indicate that there is a large amount of data or information supporting a particular conclusion.
notwithstandingDespite; in spite of.
it could be argued thatA phrase used to introduce a possible argument or point of view, often to present a nuanced or less definitive statement.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

补充

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

对比

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

因果

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

举例

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

让步

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

含让步关系的复合句

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

展现高级语法掌控力。以「虽然name」+相反观点开头,再陈述你的立场——体现细致入微的思考。

条件句(第二类)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

非常适合假设情景和解决方案。结构:「If + 过去式,would + 动词原形」——展现灵活性和想象力。

使用被动语态以name语气

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

name name倾向使用被动结构。「It is + 过去分词 + that」能营造权威、客观的语气。

关系从句

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

在不增加复杂度的前提下提升句子精密度。对人用「who」,对物用「which」,两者皆可用「that」。

名词短语增加信息密度

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

用更少的词承载更多信息。「有效政策的实施」对比「政策被有效实施」——提升name分数。

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