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Discussionacademic·2022

Some people believe that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, believe that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Andika angalau maneno 250. Unapaswa kutumia takriban dakika 40 katika kazi hii.

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Step 1

Vidokezo vya Mtahini kwa Mada Hii

1

Dedicate one full body paragraph to thoroughly discuss each of the two opposing views presented in the question. For instance, your first body paragraph should explore arguments for increasing sports facilities, while the second should focus on why this might have little effect and what other measures are needed. This ensures a balanced discussion before you present your own opinion in the conclusion, avoiding a one-sided argument.

2

When discussing the benefits of sports facilities, consider examples like Singapore's extensive 'Sports Hub' initiatives which integrate community spaces with athletic venues, fostering participation. For the counter-argument, you could mention the effectiveness of public health campaigns (e.g., '5-a-day' fruit and vegetable promotion) or policy interventions like sugar taxes in the UK or Mexico, which directly address dietary habits rather than just providing exercise opportunities.

3

The most common mistake students make on this specific question is failing to adequately develop the 'other measures are required' side of the argument, or only superficially discussing why sports facilities might have 'little effect'. To avoid this, ensure your second body paragraph clearly articulates *why* facilities alone aren't enough (e.g., lack of motivation, time, cost, or the dominance of unhealthy diets) and then propose concrete alternative solutions like health education, urban planning for walkability, or food policy.

4

For this discussion essay, employ clear transitional phrases between paragraphs to guide the examiner through your argument. Start your first body paragraph with a phrase like 'Proponents of increasing sports facilities argue that...' and your second with 'Conversely, others contend that this approach alone is insufficient...' In your conclusion, introduce your personal opinion using phrases such as 'Having considered both perspectives, I am inclined to believe that...' to clearly signal your stance.

5

Examiners look for a nuanced understanding of the public health dilemma, demonstrating that you grasp the complexity beyond a simple 'either/or' choice. A band 8-9 answer will not only discuss both views comprehensively but also integrate them in the conclusion to form a sophisticated personal opinion, perhaps suggesting a multi-pronged approach. Precision in vocabulary (e.g., 'sedentary lifestyles,' 'preventative healthcare,' 'urban infrastructure') and a consistent, clear argument flow are crucial.

Step 2

Muundo wa Aya Unaopendekezwa

1
Utangulizi

Tambulisha pande zote mbili za mjadala na utaje ni ipi utakayoizungumzia.

  • Monyeshe mtahini kuwa unaelewa mitazamo YOTE MIWILI.
  • Kwa hiari, taja upande unaounga mkono.
  • Dumisha mtazamo usioegemea upande wowote na wenye uwiano.

Misemo ya Kuanzia

There are differing opinions on whether...While some people believe that..., others argue that...This essay will examine both perspectives before reaching a conclusion.
2
Aya ya Mwili 1 — Mtazamo wa Kwanza

Wasilisha upande mmoja wa hoja kwa usawa, ukiwa na ushahidi.

  • Hata kama hukubaliani, wasilisha mtazamo huu kwa heshima na kwa mfano halisi.
  • Tumia lugha ya kuripoti: 'Some argue...', 'Proponents suggest...'
  • Malizia kwa kutambua nguvu ya mtazamo huu.

Misemo ya Kuanzia

On the one hand, supporters of this view argue that...Those in favour point out that...A key argument for this position is...
3
Kifungu cha Mwili 2 — Mtazamo Tofauti

Wasilisha upande mwingine kwa kina na ushahidi sawa.

  • Linganisha muundo wa aya ya 1 kwa usawa.
  • Tumia maneno ya kuunganisha yenye utofauti ili kuashiria mabadiliko.
  • Ikiwa una maoni, aya hii inaweza kuwa na nguvu zaidi kidogo.

Misemo ya Kuanzia

On the other hand, critics contend that...However, there is a strong counter-argument...Conversely, many people feel that...
4
Hitimisho

Fupisha maoni yote mawili na utoe maoni yako mwenyewe (ikiwa utaulizwa).

  • Kubali uhalali wa pande zote mbili
  • Taja upendeleo wako waziwazi ikiwa swali linauliza 'give your opinion'
  • Usikae katikati kila wakati — chukua msimamo.

Misemo ya Kuanzia

In conclusion, while both sides have merit, I believe that...Having considered both arguments, it seems that...

Step 3

Msamiati Muhimu

public health initiativesOrganized efforts by governments or communities to improve the health of a population.
sedentary lifestylesWays of living that involve little to no physical activity, often characterized by prolonged sitting.
preventative healthcareMeasures taken to prevent diseases rather than curing them or treating their symptoms.
it is widely acknowledged thatA phrase used to introduce a generally accepted fact or belief.
a compelling argument can be madeA phrase used to introduce a strong and convincing point or reason.
this notion is predicated onThis idea or concept is based or dependent on a particular assumption or principle.
from my perspectiveA phrase used to introduce one's personal opinion or viewpoint.
the evidence overwhelmingly suggestsA phrase indicating that there is a large amount of data or proof supporting a particular conclusion.
notwithstandingDespite; in spite of.
it could be argued thatA phrase used to introduce a possible argument or point of view, often to present an alternative or counter-argument.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

Kujumlisha

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

Tofauti

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

Sababu / Athari

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

Mfano

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

Ruzuku

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

Sentensi changamano yenye konsesheni

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

Inamwonyesha mtahini kuwa unaweza kushughulikia sentensi tegemezi. Anza na 'Although/While' + mtazamo tofauti, kisha toa mtazamo wako.

Masharti (Aina ya 2)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

Inafaa kwa hoja na suluhisho za kinadharia. 'If + past simple, would + infinitive'.

Sauti ya utendaji kwa ajili ya sauti ya kitaaluma

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

Uandishi wa kitaaluma unapendelea matumizi ya sauti ya upatanishi. 'It is + past participle + that' inasikika kuwa na mamlaka.

Kifungu cha uhusiano

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

Vifungu vya uhusiano huongeza maelezo bila kuanza sentensi mpya. Tumia 'who' kwa watu, 'which' kwa vitu.

Kifungu cha nomino kwa msongamano

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

Weka taarifa katika virai nomino badala ya kutumia sentensi nyingi fupi. Hii itakusaidia kupata alama za juu katika Lexical Resource.

Step 6

Jibu la Mfano

Jisajili bila malipo ili usome jibu kamili la mfano kwa mada hii.

Jisajili ili Usome Jibu la Mfano

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