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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Step 1

IELTS ፈታኝ ምክሮች ለዚህ ርዕስ

1

Ensure your essay dedicates a distinct, fully developed body paragraph to each of the two opposing viewpoints presented in the prompt. For instance, dedicate BP1 to fixed punishments and BP2 to individualized sentencing, exploring their respective merits and drawbacks. Avoid the common pitfall of discussing both views superficially within a single paragraph or heavily favouring one side throughout the essay, as this will undermine your Task Response score.

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For the 'fixed punishments' view, you could discuss how it promotes deterrence and equality before the law, citing examples like mandatory minimum sentences in some jurisdictions (e.g., for drug offenses in certain US states) or the concept of 'an eye for an eye' in historical legal systems. For the 'individualized approach,' consider cases of self-defence, crimes of passion, or offenses committed by minors, where a rigid sentence would be unjust, perhaps mentioning restorative justice initiatives in countries like New Zealand.

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The most common mistake students make on this specific question is failing to adequately 'discuss both views' by either presenting them too briefly or allowing personal bias to dominate one of the body paragraphs. To avoid this, consciously allocate roughly equal paragraph length and depth to each perspective, using neutral language when explaining the view you don't personally agree with, before clearly stating your own nuanced opinion in the conclusion.

4

To effectively transition between discussing the two views, use clear contrasting phrases at the beginning of your second body paragraph. For example, after discussing fixed punishments, you could begin the next paragraph with 'Conversely,' 'On the other hand,' or 'However, proponents of a more flexible approach contend that...' This signals to the examiner that you are shifting to the opposing perspective, enhancing coherence and cohesion.

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For a band 8-9, examiners look for a sophisticated understanding of the complexities of criminal justice, demonstrating a nuanced discussion of both the philosophical underpinnings and practical implications of each sentencing approach. This includes a well-supported personal opinion that synthesizes the arguments, a wide range of precise vocabulary related to law and ethics, and consistently accurate grammar, all contributing to a clear, logical, and compelling argument.

Step 2

የሚመከር የድርሰት አወቃቀር (Band 7+ ደረጃ)

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መግቢያ

ሁለቱን ወገኖች ፍትሃዊ በሆነ መንገድ አቅርቦ አቋምህን አሳይ።

  • ሁለቱንም አመለካከቶች መረዳትህን አሳይ — ይህ ወሳኝ አስተሳሰብህን ያሳያል
  • ወደ የት እንደምትደግፍ ግለጽ — ሁለቱን እኩል ብትዳስስም
  • academic ቃና ጠብቅ — ስሜታዊ ቋንቋ ወይም አድልዎ ያስወግዱ

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

There are differing opinions on whether...While some people believe that..., others argue that...This essay will examine both perspectives before reaching a conclusion.
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አካል አንቀጽ 1 — የመጀመሪያ አመለካከት

አንድ ወገን በአክብሮት እና በአሳማኝ መንገድ አቅርብ።

  • ባትስማማም፣ ይህን አመለካከት በእውነተኛ ምሳሌ ቀጥተኛ አቅርብ
  • academic የሪፖርት ቋንቋ ተጠቀም፡ 'Research indicates...', 'Studies show...', 'Experts argue...'
  • ጠንካራ ነጥቦቹን አምን — ይህ ሚዛናዊ ትንተናህን ያሳያል እና ነጥብ ያስገኛል

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

On the one hand, supporters of this view argue that...Those in favour point out that...A key argument for this position is...
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አካል አንቀጽ 2 — ተቃራኒ አመለካከት

የተቃራኒውን አስተያየት በተመሳሳይ ጥልቀትና ብቃት አቅርብ።

  • የአንደኛውን አንቀጽ መዋቅርና ጥልቀት አዛምድ — መርማሪዎች ሁለቱን ያነጻጽራሉ
  • እንደ 'Conversely'፣ 'In contrast'፣ 'On the other hand' ያሉ ተቃራኒ ማስተሳሰሪያ ቃላት ተጠቀም
  • አስተያየት ካለህ ይህን አንቀጽ ትንሽ አጠናክር — ነገር ግን ፍትሃዊ ሁን

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

On the other hand, critics contend that...However, there is a strong counter-argument...Conversely, many people feel that...
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ማጠቃለያ

ሁለቱን ሃሳቦች አጣምር፤ ወሳኝ ፍርድህን ግልጽ አድርግ።

  • የሁለቱን ወገን ትክክለኛነት አምን — ይህ የአዕምሮ ብስለትህን ያሳያል
  • ምርጫህን በግልጽና በእምነት ግለጽ — አትወዛወዝ
  • ግልጽ አቋም ያዝ — መርማሪዎች ግልጽነትን ይሸልማሉ

Band 7+ ለእያንዳንዱ አንቀጽ የሚሆኑ የዓረፍተ ነገር ጀምሮዎች

In conclusion, while both sides have merit, I believe that...Having considered both arguments, it seems that...

Step 3

ከፍተኛ ውጤት የሚያስገኙ ቃላት እና ሐረጎች

penal systemThe system of laws, courts, and prisons used to punish people who commit crimes.
rehabilitative measuresActions taken to help criminals reform and reintegrate into society.
judicial discretionThe power of a judge or magistrate to make decisions based on their own judgment within the bounds of the law.
it is widely acknowledged thatA common phrase used to introduce a generally accepted fact or belief.
a compelling argument can be madeA strong and persuasive reason can be presented.
this notion is predicated onThis idea is based on or depends on.
from my perspectiveIn my opinion or point of view.
the evidence overwhelmingly suggestsThe available information strongly indicates.
notwithstandingIn spite of; despite.
this is not to say thatThis does not mean that.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

ጭማሬ

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

ቅራኔ

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

ምክንያት / ውጤት

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

ምሳሌ

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

ስምምነት ወዳለ አቅጣጫ

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

የስምምነት ዓረፍተ ነገር

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

ከፍተኛ ሰዋሰዋዊ ቁጥጥር ያሳያል። 'Although' ብለህ ጀምር — ተቃራኒ ሃሳብ አምጣ፣ ከዚያ አቋምህን ግለጽ — ጥልቅ አስተሳሰብ ያሳያል።

ሁኔታዊ ዓረፍተ ነገር (Type 2)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

ለምናባዊ ሁኔታዎችና መፍትሔዎች ጥሩ ነው። 'If + past simple, would + infinitive' — ተለዋዋጭነት ያሳያል።

ለacademic ቃና Passive ተጠቀም

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

Academic writing passive ዓረፍተ ነገሮችን ይመርጣል። 'It is + past participle + that' — ስልጣናዊና ገለልተኛ ቃና ይሰጣል።

አንጻራዊ ዓረፍተ ነገር

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

ውስብስብ ሳይሆን ብቃትን ያሳያል። ለሰዎች 'who'፣ ለነገሮች 'which'፣ ለሁለቱም 'that' ተጠቀም።

ጥቅጥቅ ለማለት የስም ሐረግ

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

በጥቂት ቃላት ብዙ መረጃ ያስተላልፋል። 'The implementation of effective policies' እና 'policies are implemented effectively' ይወዳደሩ — Lexical Resource ውጤትን ያሻሽላል።

Step 6

Band 9 ናሙና መልስ (ሙሉ ምዘና)

ሙሉ ናሙና መልሱን እና የፈታኝ አስተያየቶችን ለማየት በነፃ ይመዝገቡ።

ሙሉ ናሙና መልስ ይመልከቱ — በነፃ ይመዝገቡ

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