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Discussionacademic·2023

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Andika angalau maneno 250. Unapaswa kutumia takriban dakika 40 katika kazi hii.

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Step 1

Vidokezo vya Mtahini kwa Mada Hii

1

Ensure your essay dedicates a distinct, fully developed body paragraph to each of the two opposing viewpoints presented in the prompt. For instance, dedicate BP1 to fixed punishments and BP2 to individualized sentencing, exploring their respective merits and drawbacks. Avoid the common pitfall of discussing both views superficially within a single paragraph or heavily favouring one side throughout the essay, as this will undermine your Task Response score.

2

For the 'fixed punishments' view, you could discuss how it promotes deterrence and equality before the law, citing examples like mandatory minimum sentences in some jurisdictions (e.g., for drug offenses in certain US states) or the concept of 'an eye for an eye' in historical legal systems. For the 'individualized approach,' consider cases of self-defence, crimes of passion, or offenses committed by minors, where a rigid sentence would be unjust, perhaps mentioning restorative justice initiatives in countries like New Zealand.

3

The most common mistake students make on this specific question is failing to adequately 'discuss both views' by either presenting them too briefly or allowing personal bias to dominate one of the body paragraphs. To avoid this, consciously allocate roughly equal paragraph length and depth to each perspective, using neutral language when explaining the view you don't personally agree with, before clearly stating your own nuanced opinion in the conclusion.

4

To effectively transition between discussing the two views, use clear contrasting phrases at the beginning of your second body paragraph. For example, after discussing fixed punishments, you could begin the next paragraph with 'Conversely,' 'On the other hand,' or 'However, proponents of a more flexible approach contend that...' This signals to the examiner that you are shifting to the opposing perspective, enhancing coherence and cohesion.

5

For a band 8-9, examiners look for a sophisticated understanding of the complexities of criminal justice, demonstrating a nuanced discussion of both the philosophical underpinnings and practical implications of each sentencing approach. This includes a well-supported personal opinion that synthesizes the arguments, a wide range of precise vocabulary related to law and ethics, and consistently accurate grammar, all contributing to a clear, logical, and compelling argument.

Step 2

Muundo wa Aya Unaopendekezwa

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Utangulizi

Tambulisha pande zote mbili za mjadala na utaje ni ipi utakayoizungumzia.

  • Monyeshe mtahini kuwa unaelewa mitazamo YOTE MIWILI.
  • Kwa hiari, taja upande unaounga mkono.
  • Dumisha mtazamo usioegemea upande wowote na wenye uwiano.

Misemo ya Kuanzia

There are differing opinions on whether...While some people believe that..., others argue that...This essay will examine both perspectives before reaching a conclusion.
2
Aya ya Mwili 1 — Mtazamo wa Kwanza

Wasilisha upande mmoja wa hoja kwa usawa, ukiwa na ushahidi.

  • Hata kama hukubaliani, wasilisha mtazamo huu kwa heshima na kwa mfano halisi.
  • Tumia lugha ya kuripoti: 'Some argue...', 'Proponents suggest...'
  • Malizia kwa kutambua nguvu ya mtazamo huu.

Misemo ya Kuanzia

On the one hand, supporters of this view argue that...Those in favour point out that...A key argument for this position is...
3
Kifungu cha Mwili 2 — Mtazamo Tofauti

Wasilisha upande mwingine kwa kina na ushahidi sawa.

  • Linganisha muundo wa aya ya 1 kwa usawa.
  • Tumia maneno ya kuunganisha yenye utofauti ili kuashiria mabadiliko.
  • Ikiwa una maoni, aya hii inaweza kuwa na nguvu zaidi kidogo.

Misemo ya Kuanzia

On the other hand, critics contend that...However, there is a strong counter-argument...Conversely, many people feel that...
4
Hitimisho

Fupisha maoni yote mawili na utoe maoni yako mwenyewe (ikiwa utaulizwa).

  • Kubali uhalali wa pande zote mbili
  • Taja upendeleo wako waziwazi ikiwa swali linauliza 'give your opinion'
  • Usikae katikati kila wakati — chukua msimamo.

Misemo ya Kuanzia

In conclusion, while both sides have merit, I believe that...Having considered both arguments, it seems that...

Step 3

Msamiati Muhimu

penal systemThe system of laws, courts, and prisons used to punish people who commit crimes.
rehabilitative measuresActions taken to help criminals reform and reintegrate into society.
judicial discretionThe power of a judge or magistrate to make decisions based on their own judgment within the bounds of the law.
it is widely acknowledged thatA common phrase used to introduce a generally accepted fact or belief.
a compelling argument can be madeA strong and persuasive reason can be presented.
this notion is predicated onThis idea is based on or depends on.
from my perspectiveIn my opinion or point of view.
the evidence overwhelmingly suggestsThe available information strongly indicates.
notwithstandingIn spite of; despite.
this is not to say thatThis does not mean that.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

Kujumlisha

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

Tofauti

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

Sababu / Athari

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

Mfano

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

Ruzuku

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

Sentensi changamano yenye konsesheni

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

Inamwonyesha mtahini kuwa unaweza kushughulikia sentensi tegemezi. Anza na 'Although/While' + mtazamo tofauti, kisha toa mtazamo wako.

Masharti (Aina ya 2)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

Inafaa kwa hoja na suluhisho za kinadharia. 'If + past simple, would + infinitive'.

Sauti ya utendaji kwa ajili ya sauti ya kitaaluma

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

Uandishi wa kitaaluma unapendelea matumizi ya sauti ya upatanishi. 'It is + past participle + that' inasikika kuwa na mamlaka.

Kifungu cha uhusiano

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

Vifungu vya uhusiano huongeza maelezo bila kuanza sentensi mpya. Tumia 'who' kwa watu, 'which' kwa vitu.

Kifungu cha nomino kwa msongamano

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

Weka taarifa katika virai nomino badala ya kutumia sentensi nyingi fupi. Hii itakusaidia kupata alama za juu katika Lexical Resource.

Step 6

Jibu la Mfano

Jisajili bila malipo ili usome jibu kamili la mfano kwa mada hii.

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