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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Step 1

이 주제에 대한 IELTS 시험관 팁

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For this discussion essay, dedicate a distinct body paragraph to each perspective presented in the prompt. This means one paragraph fully exploring the arguments for parental responsibility and another for the school's role. Avoid blending the views within a single paragraph or giving disproportionate attention to one side, as this can undermine your task response score by failing to adequately 'discuss both views'.

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When discussing parental influence, consider the concept of 'modelling behaviour' and the early developmental stages where children absorb values from their immediate family environment. For the school's role, you could reference civics education programs common in many Western curricula or the structured environment of a classroom that fosters collaboration and conflict resolution. Think about real-world examples like the 'character education' initiatives in some US schools, or how traditional family values in cultures like Japan often emphasize respect for elders and community participation from a young age.

3

A common pitfall for this question is to simply list responsibilities without *discussing* how each entity (parents/school) *teaches* these values. Students often state 'parents teach respect' but fail to elaborate on *how* they do this (e.g., through consistent discipline, setting boundaries, demonstrating empathy). To avoid this, ensure each argument is followed by clear explanation and specific examples of the methods or environments through which these social lessons are imparted, rather than just stating the outcome.

4

To effectively transition between discussing the two views, use phrases that signal a shift to an opposing or alternative perspective. Examples include 'Conversely,' 'On the other hand,' or 'While the aforementioned arguments highlight the primary role of parents, an alternative perspective posits that...'. Within paragraphs, use cohesive devices like 'Furthermore,' 'Moreover,' and 'Consequently' to build your arguments logically, ensuring a smooth flow of ideas.

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Examiners look for a nuanced discussion that acknowledges the complex interplay between home and school in shaping a child's social conscience, rather than presenting them as mutually exclusive entities. A band 8-9 essay will likely integrate the idea of a shared responsibility or a complementary relationship in its conclusion. Sophisticated vocabulary related to socialisation, moral development, and educational pedagogy, alongside complex grammatical structures used accurately and flexibly, will also be key indicators of a high band score.

Step 2

권장 에세이 구조 (Band 7+ 표준)

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소개

양측을 공정하게 제시하고 본인의 입장을 확립함으로써 실력을 보여주세요.

  • 양측 관점 모두에 대한 이해를 보여주세요 — 이것이 비판적 사고를 보여줍니다
  • 본인이 어느 쪽에 기울어져 있는지 밝히세요 — 양측을 동등하게 논의하더라도
  • 중립적이고 학문적인 어조를 유지하세요 — 감정적 언어나 편향을 피하세요

각 단락별 Band 7+ 문장 시작 표현

There are differing opinions on whether...While some people believe that..., others argue that...This essay will examine both perspectives before reaching a conclusion.
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본문 1단락 — 첫 번째 관점

한쪽 측면을 존중과 신뢰성 있게 제시하세요.

  • 동의하지 않더라도 실제 예시를 통해 이 관점을 진정성 있게 제시하세요
  • 학문적인 보고 언어 사용: '연구에 따르면...', '연구 결과는 보여줍니다...', '전문가들은 주장합니다...'
  • 강점을 인정하세요 — 이것이 균형 잡힌 분석을 보여주고 점수를 얻습니다

각 단락별 Band 7+ 문장 시작 표현

On the one hand, supporters of this view argue that...Those in favour point out that...A key argument for this position is...
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본문 2단락 — 반대 관점

반대 의견도 동일한 깊이와 정교함으로 제시하세요.

  • 1단락의 구조와 깊이를 맞추세요 — 채점관이 비교합니다
  • 대조적 전환어 사용: '반대로', '대조적으로', '다른 한편으로는'
  • 의견이 있다면 이 단락을 약간 더 강하게 — 하지만 공정하게

각 단락별 Band 7+ 문장 시작 표현

On the other hand, critics contend that...However, there is a strong counter-argument...Conversely, many people feel that...
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결론

양쪽 관점을 종합하고 결정적인 판단을 내리세요.

  • 양쪽 타당성 인정 — 지적 성숙도를 보여줍니다
  • 선호도를 명확하고 자신 있게 밝히세요 — 흔들리지 마세요
  • 확고한 입장 취하기 — 채점관은 중립보다 명확성을 높이 평가합니다

각 단락별 Band 7+ 문장 시작 표현

In conclusion, while both sides have merit, I believe that...Having considered both arguments, it seems that...

Step 3

고득점 어휘 & 연어

socialisation processThe lifelong process of inheriting and disseminating norms, customs, and ideologies, providing an individual with the skills and habits necessary for participating within their own society.
civic responsibilityThe duties and obligations of a citizen to their community and country, including participation in public life and adherence to laws.
moral compassAn inner sense of what is right and wrong that guides a person's behaviour.
it is widely acknowledged thatA phrase used to introduce a generally accepted fact or belief.
a compelling argument can be madeA phrase used to introduce a strong and persuasive point.
this notion is predicated onThis idea is based or dependent upon a particular assumption or principle.
from my perspectiveA phrase used to introduce one's personal opinion or viewpoint.
the evidence overwhelmingly suggestsA phrase used to indicate that there is a great deal of support for a particular claim.
notwithstandingIn spite of; despite.
it could be argued thatA phrase used to introduce a point that is open to debate or a potential counter-argument, often used for hedging.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

추가

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

대조

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

원인 / 결과

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

예시

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

양보

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

양보절이 포함된 복잡한 문장

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

고급 문법 통제력을 보여줍니다. 'Althoughname' + 반대 의견으로 시작한 후 본인의 입장을 밝히세요 — 미묘한 사고를 보여줍니다.

조건문 (Type 2)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

가상 시나리오와 해결책에 완벽합니다. 구조: 'If + 과거 단순형, would + 원형 부정사' — 유연성과 상상력을 보여줍니다.

name 톤을 위한 수동태

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

score name는 수동 구문을 선호합니다. 'It is + 과거 분사 + that'는 권위 있고 객관적인 톤을 만듭니다.

관계절

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

복잡함 없이 정교함을 더합니다. 사람은 'who', 사물은 'which', 둘 다는 'that'을 사용하세요.

밀도를 위한 명사구

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

더 적은 단어에 더 많은 정보를 담습니다. '효과적인 정책의 시행' vs '정책이 효과적으로 시행된다' — name 점수를 높입니다.

Step 6

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