Some people believe that children are put under too much pressure to succeed at school. Parents and teachers should only focus on how well children can perform, not on their emotional well-being. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
कम्तिमा २५० शब्द लेख्नुहोस्। तपाईंले यो कार्यमा लगभग ४० मिनेट बिताउनु पर्छ।
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Step 1
यस विषयको लागि परीक्षक सुझावहरू
For this question, you must state a clear position in your introduction, likely disagreeing with the idea that parents and teachers should *only* focus on performance. While acknowledging the importance of academic achievement, immediately pivot to argue that neglecting emotional well-being is short-sighted and ultimately counterproductive to true success.
To support your disagreement, consider arguments such as the necessity of holistic development for long-term success and well-being, the link between emotional health and sustained academic motivation, and the potential for severe mental health issues (e.g., anxiety, burnout) in high-pressure environments. You could reference educational systems like Finland's, which prioritize play and well-being, yet consistently rank high globally, or contrast this with the rising rates of student depression in highly competitive academic cultures.
The most common mistake students make on this question is failing to address the absolute qualifier 'only focus on' and instead discussing general pros and cons of academic pressure. Avoid sitting on the fence; the prompt's extreme stance ('only focus on performance, not on emotional well-being') demands a strong disagreement, arguing that such an approach is fundamentally flawed and unsustainable.
When structuring your arguments, use a 'concession and rebuttal' strategy. Start a paragraph by acknowledging the opposing view's merit (e.g., 'It is undeniable that academic achievement is crucial for future opportunities...'), then immediately introduce your counter-argument using phrases like 'However, this perspective overlooks the fundamental role of emotional resilience...' or 'Nevertheless, an exclusive focus on grades can inadvertently undermine...'.
Examiners look for a nuanced understanding of the complex interplay between academic pressure and child development for a band 8-9. This means demonstrating how emotional well-being is not merely a 'soft skill' but a foundational component for sustained academic performance, critical thinking, and overall life success. Use sophisticated vocabulary related to child psychology, educational philosophy, and long-term societal impacts, maintaining a consistent, well-supported argument throughout.
Step 2
सिफारिस गरिएको अनुच्छेद संरचना
1परिचय
प्रश्नलाई पुन: लेख्नुहोस् र तपाईंको स्थिति स्पष्ट रूपमा बताउनुहोस्।
- प्रश्नलाई शब्दशः कहिल्यै नक्कल नगर्नुहोस् — पर्यायवाची शब्दहरू प्रयोग गरेर पुन: लेख्नुहोस्
- परिचयको अन्तिम वाक्यमा आफ्नो राय व्यक्त गर्नुहोस्।
- यसलाई अधिकतम २-३ वाक्यमा राख्नुहोस्।
सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू
It is often argued that...There is a growing debate about whether...In my view, ... because ...2मुख्य अनुच्छेद १ — मुख्य तर्क
एक विशिष्ट उदाहरण सहित आफ्नो सबैभन्दा बलियो तर्क प्रस्तुत गर्नुहोस्।
- तर्क प्रस्तुत गर्ने स्पष्ट विषय वाक्यबाट सुरु गर्नुहोस्।
- कुनै खास उदाहरण, तथ्याङ्क, वा वास्तविक-विश्वको घटनाद्वारा समर्थन गर्नुहोस्।
- यो उदाहरणले तपाईंको कुरालाई किन समर्थन गर्छ व्याख्या गर्नुहोस्।
सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू
The primary reason I hold this view is that...This is clearly illustrated by...For instance, in many countries...3मुख्य अनुच्छेद २ — समर्थन तर्क
तपाईंको स्थितिलाई फरक कोणबाट बलियो बनाउने दोस्रो तर्क थप्नुहोस्।
- एउटा फरक कोण छनौट गर्नुहोस् — यदि अनुच्छेद १ आर्थिक थियो भने, सामाजिक वा वातावरणीय प्रयास गर्नुहोस्।
- विभिन्न प्रकारका प्रमाणहरू (व्यक्तिगत अवलोकन, अनुसन्धान, तर्क) प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्।
- तपाईंको थेसिसमा फर्कनुहोस्
सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू
Furthermore, it is worth considering that...Another compelling argument is that...This is further supported by the fact that...4निष्कर्ष
तपाईंको रायलाई पुनः बताउनुहोस् र तपाईंको मुख्य तर्कहरूलाई सङ्क्षेपीकरण गर्नुहोस्।
- निष्कर्षमा नयाँ विचारहरू नल्याउनुहोस्।
- परिचयमा प्रयोग गरिएका शब्दहरूभन्दा फरक शब्दहरू प्रयोग गरेर आफ्नो स्थिति पुन: बताउनुहोस्।
- यसलाई २ वाक्यमा राख्नुहोस्।
सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू
In conclusion, I firmly believe that...To sum up, the evidence clearly suggests that...Step 3
मुख्य शब्दावली
Step 4
Academic Phrases for This Essay Type
It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignoreथप
MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is moreविपरीत
HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConverselyकारण / प्रभाव
ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads toउदाहरण
For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch asछुट
AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedlyStep 5
Grammar Patterns for Band 7+
सहुलियत सहितको जटिल वाक्य
Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.
तपाईंले अधीनस्थ खण्डहरूलाई कसरी सम्हाल्न सक्नुहुन्छ भनी परीक्षकलाई देखाउँछ। 'Although/While' + विपरीत दृष्टिकोणबाट सुरु गर्नुहोस्, त्यसपछि आफ्नो दृष्टिकोण बताउनुहोस्।
सशर्त (प्रकार २)
If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.
काल्पनिक तर्क र समाधानहरूको लागि उत्तम। 'If + past simple, would + infinitive'।
शैक्षिक स्वरका लागि निष्क्रिय
It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.
शैक्षिक लेखनमा निष्क्रिय संरचनाहरूलाई प्राथमिकता दिइन्छ। 'It is + past participle + that' ले आधिकारिकता झल्काउँछ।
सापेक्ष खण्ड
Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.
सापेक्ष खण्डहरूले नयाँ वाक्य सुरु नगरी विवरणहरू थप्छन्। मानिसहरूका लागि 'who', वस्तुहरूका लागि 'which' प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्।
घनत्वको लागि संज्ञा वाक्यांश
The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.
धेरै छोटो वाक्यहरू प्रयोग गर्नुको सट्टा संज्ञा वाक्यांशहरूमा जानकारी प्याक गर्नुहोस्। यसले तपाईंको Lexical Resource स्कोर बढाउँछ।
Step 6
मोडेल उत्तर
यस विषयको लागि पूर्ण मोडेल उत्तर पढ्न नि:शुल्क साइन अप गर्नुहोस्।
मोडेल उत्तर पढ्न साइन अप गर्नुहोस्कागजमा अभ्यास गर्नुहोस्
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