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Two-Partacademic·2024

Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished? What measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

कम्तिमा २५० शब्द लेख्नुहोस्। तपाईंले यो कार्यमा लगभग ४० मिनेट बिताउनु पर्छ।

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Step 1

यस विषयको लागि परीक्षक सुझावहरू

1

For this two-part question, dedicate a distinct body paragraph to each part of the prompt. Body Paragraph 1 should thoroughly explore the reasons why criminals re-offend, while Body Paragraph 2 must focus entirely on the specific measures that can be taken to tackle this problem. Failing to address both questions adequately is a common reason for losing marks on Task Response.

2

When discussing reasons for re-offending, consider factors like the lack of effective rehabilitation programmes in prisons, socio-economic disadvantages post-release (e.g., difficulty finding employment, societal stigma), and the influence of criminal networks. For measures, you could refer to successful models like Norway's focus on restorative justice and vocational training within prisons, or the importance of robust post-release support systems to aid reintegration into society.

3

A common pitfall is to oversimplify the issue by blaming only the individual or suggesting overly simplistic solutions like 'harsher punishments.' Avoid this by acknowledging the multifaceted nature of recidivism, considering both systemic failures (e.g., inadequate rehabilitation) and individual challenges (e.g., addiction, lack of skills). Present nuanced arguments that reflect a deeper understanding of the problem.

4

Ensure a smooth and logical transition between your discussion of causes and solutions. A strong linking phrase at the start of your second body paragraph could be: 'Having explored the underlying reasons for the persistence of criminal behaviour, it is imperative to now consider the proactive measures required to mitigate this societal challenge.' This clearly signals to the examiner that you are moving to the next part of the question.

5

Examiners look for a comprehensive and nuanced discussion that goes beyond surface-level observations. A band 8-9 response will demonstrate a sophisticated understanding of both the psychological and sociological factors contributing to recidivism, and propose well-reasoned, practical, and multi-faceted solutions. The language used should be precise, academic, and demonstrate a wide range of topic-specific vocabulary, alongside complex grammatical structures used accurately.

Step 2

सिफारिस गरिएको अनुच्छेद संरचना

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परिचय

प्रश्नलाई पुन: लेख्नुहोस् र तपाईंको स्थिति स्पष्ट रूपमा बताउनुहोस्।

  • प्रश्नलाई शब्दशः कहिल्यै नक्कल नगर्नुहोस् — पर्यायवाची शब्दहरू प्रयोग गरेर पुन: लेख्नुहोस्
  • परिचयको अन्तिम वाक्यमा आफ्नो राय व्यक्त गर्नुहोस्।
  • यसलाई अधिकतम २-३ वाक्यमा राख्नुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

It is often argued that...There is a growing debate about whether...In my view, ... because ...
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मुख्य अनुच्छेद १ — मुख्य तर्क

एक विशिष्ट उदाहरण सहित आफ्नो सबैभन्दा बलियो तर्क प्रस्तुत गर्नुहोस्।

  • तर्क प्रस्तुत गर्ने स्पष्ट विषय वाक्यबाट सुरु गर्नुहोस्।
  • कुनै खास उदाहरण, तथ्याङ्क, वा वास्तविक-विश्वको घटनाद्वारा समर्थन गर्नुहोस्।
  • यो उदाहरणले तपाईंको कुरालाई किन समर्थन गर्छ व्याख्या गर्नुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

The primary reason I hold this view is that...This is clearly illustrated by...For instance, in many countries...
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मुख्य अनुच्छेद २ — समर्थन तर्क

तपाईंको स्थितिलाई फरक कोणबाट बलियो बनाउने दोस्रो तर्क थप्नुहोस्।

  • एउटा फरक कोण छनौट गर्नुहोस् — यदि अनुच्छेद १ आर्थिक थियो भने, सामाजिक वा वातावरणीय प्रयास गर्नुहोस्।
  • विभिन्न प्रकारका प्रमाणहरू (व्यक्तिगत अवलोकन, अनुसन्धान, तर्क) प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्।
  • तपाईंको थेसिसमा फर्कनुहोस्

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

Furthermore, it is worth considering that...Another compelling argument is that...This is further supported by the fact that...
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निष्कर्ष

तपाईंको रायलाई पुनः बताउनुहोस् र तपाईंको मुख्य तर्कहरूलाई सङ्क्षेपीकरण गर्नुहोस्।

  • निष्कर्षमा नयाँ विचारहरू नल्याउनुहोस्।
  • परिचयमा प्रयोग गरिएका शब्दहरूभन्दा फरक शब्दहरू प्रयोग गरेर आफ्नो स्थिति पुन: बताउनुहोस्।
  • यसलाई २ वाक्यमा राख्नुहोस्।

सुरुवाती वाक्यांशहरू

In conclusion, I firmly believe that...To sum up, the evidence clearly suggests that...

Step 3

मुख्य शब्दावली

RecidivismThe tendency of a convicted criminal to re-offend.
Punitive measuresActions intended as punishment; disciplinary actions.
Rehabilitation programmesStructured interventions designed to help offenders reintegrate into society as law-abiding citizens.
It is widely acknowledged thatA phrase used to introduce a generally accepted fact or belief.
A compelling argument can be madeA phrase used to introduce a strong and persuasive point.
This notion is predicated onThis idea or concept is based on or depends on.
From my perspectiveA phrase used to introduce one's personal opinion or viewpoint.
The evidence overwhelmingly suggestsA phrase used to indicate that there is a great deal of proof supporting a particular conclusion.
NotwithstandingIn spite of; despite.
It could be argued thatA phrase used to introduce a possible interpretation or contention, often to present a balanced view.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

थप

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

विपरीत

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

कारण / प्रभाव

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

उदाहरण

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

छुट

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

सहुलियत सहितको जटिल वाक्य

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

तपाईंले अधीनस्थ खण्डहरूलाई कसरी सम्हाल्न सक्नुहुन्छ भनी परीक्षकलाई देखाउँछ। 'Although/While' + विपरीत दृष्टिकोणबाट सुरु गर्नुहोस्, त्यसपछि आफ्नो दृष्टिकोण बताउनुहोस्।

सशर्त (प्रकार २)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

काल्पनिक तर्क र समाधानहरूको लागि उत्तम। 'If + past simple, would + infinitive'।

शैक्षिक स्वरका लागि निष्क्रिय

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

शैक्षिक लेखनमा निष्क्रिय संरचनाहरूलाई प्राथमिकता दिइन्छ। 'It is + past participle + that' ले आधिकारिकता झल्काउँछ।

सापेक्ष खण्ड

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

सापेक्ष खण्डहरूले नयाँ वाक्य सुरु नगरी विवरणहरू थप्छन्। मानिसहरूका लागि 'who', वस्तुहरूका लागि 'which' प्रयोग गर्नुहोस्।

घनत्वको लागि संज्ञा वाक्यांश

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

धेरै छोटो वाक्यहरू प्रयोग गर्नुको सट्टा संज्ञा वाक्यांशहरूमा जानकारी प्याक गर्नुहोस्। यसले तपाईंको Lexical Resource स्कोर बढाउँछ।

Step 6

मोडेल उत्तर

यस विषयको लागि पूर्ण मोडेल उत्तर पढ्न नि:शुल्क साइन अप गर्नुहोस्।

मोडेल उत्तर पढ्न साइन अप गर्नुहोस्

कागजमा अभ्यास गर्नुहोस्

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