Some people think that the main aim of punishment is to teach the wrong-doer right from wrong and make him lead a normal life in future. Others, however, believe that punishing someone is the best way to send a message to other criminals not to commit crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Andika angalau maneno 250. Unapaswa kutumia takriban dakika 40 katika kazi hii.
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Step 1
Vidokezo vya Mtahini kwa Mada Hii
Dedicate one full body paragraph to each of the two distinct views presented in the question: one on punishment as rehabilitation and another on punishment as a deterrent. This structured approach ensures you address both sides thoroughly and avoid being perceived as too one-sided, which is crucial for a 'discuss both views' essay.
To strengthen your arguments, consider specific examples. For rehabilitation, you could mention restorative justice programs in countries like New Zealand or Norway, which focus on reintegration and reduced recidivism. For deterrence, discuss the strict penal codes in Singapore or the ongoing debate around capital punishment in some regions, highlighting their intended impact on potential offenders.
A common mistake on this question is failing to clearly differentiate between the two aims of punishment, often blending them or focusing disproportionately on one. To avoid this, use clear topic sentences for each body paragraph that explicitly state which view you are discussing, ensuring a balanced and well-structured argument.
Employ a clear linking strategy to guide the reader through your discussion. Start your second body paragraph with a phrase like 'Conversely, another school of thought posits that...' or 'While the aforementioned perspective focuses on individual reform, a different viewpoint emphasizes...' to signal the shift to the opposing argument.
For a band 8-9 answer, examiners look for a nuanced discussion that acknowledges the complexities of both views, supported by precise vocabulary related to criminology and justice (e.g., 'recidivism,' 'penal reform,' 'societal retribution,' 'general deterrence'). Your personal opinion in the conclusion should not simply choose one view but ideally offer a sophisticated synthesis or prioritize one aim with clear justification, demonstrating critical thinking.
Step 2
Muundo wa Aya Unaopendekezwa
1Utangulizi
Tambulisha pande zote mbili za mjadala na utaje ni ipi utakayoizungumzia.
- Monyeshe mtahini kuwa unaelewa mitazamo YOTE MIWILI.
- Kwa hiari, taja upande unaounga mkono.
- Dumisha mtazamo usioegemea upande wowote na wenye uwiano.
Misemo ya Kuanzia
There are differing opinions on whether...While some people believe that..., others argue that...This essay will examine both perspectives before reaching a conclusion.2Aya ya Mwili 1 — Mtazamo wa Kwanza
Wasilisha upande mmoja wa hoja kwa usawa, ukiwa na ushahidi.
- Hata kama hukubaliani, wasilisha mtazamo huu kwa heshima na kwa mfano halisi.
- Tumia lugha ya kuripoti: 'Some argue...', 'Proponents suggest...'
- Malizia kwa kutambua nguvu ya mtazamo huu.
Misemo ya Kuanzia
On the one hand, supporters of this view argue that...Those in favour point out that...A key argument for this position is...3Kifungu cha Mwili 2 — Mtazamo Tofauti
Wasilisha upande mwingine kwa kina na ushahidi sawa.
- Linganisha muundo wa aya ya 1 kwa usawa.
- Tumia maneno ya kuunganisha yenye utofauti ili kuashiria mabadiliko.
- Ikiwa una maoni, aya hii inaweza kuwa na nguvu zaidi kidogo.
Misemo ya Kuanzia
On the other hand, critics contend that...However, there is a strong counter-argument...Conversely, many people feel that...4Hitimisho
Fupisha maoni yote mawili na utoe maoni yako mwenyewe (ikiwa utaulizwa).
- Kubali uhalali wa pande zote mbili
- Taja upendeleo wako waziwazi ikiwa swali linauliza 'give your opinion'
- Usikae katikati kila wakati — chukua msimamo.
Misemo ya Kuanzia
In conclusion, while both sides have merit, I believe that...Having considered both arguments, it seems that...Step 3
Msamiati Muhimu
Step 4
Academic Phrases for This Essay Type
It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignoreKujumlisha
MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is moreTofauti
HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConverselySababu / Athari
ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads toMfano
For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch asRuzuku
AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedlyStep 5
Grammar Patterns for Band 7+
Sentensi changamano yenye konsesheni
Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.
Inamwonyesha mtahini kuwa unaweza kushughulikia sentensi tegemezi. Anza na 'Although/While' + mtazamo tofauti, kisha toa mtazamo wako.
Masharti (Aina ya 2)
If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.
Inafaa kwa hoja na suluhisho za kinadharia. 'If + past simple, would + infinitive'.
Sauti ya utendaji kwa ajili ya sauti ya kitaaluma
It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.
Uandishi wa kitaaluma unapendelea matumizi ya sauti ya upatanishi. 'It is + past participle + that' inasikika kuwa na mamlaka.
Kifungu cha uhusiano
Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.
Vifungu vya uhusiano huongeza maelezo bila kuanza sentensi mpya. Tumia 'who' kwa watu, 'which' kwa vitu.
Kifungu cha nomino kwa msongamano
The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.
Weka taarifa katika virai nomino badala ya kutumia sentensi nyingi fupi. Hii itakusaidia kupata alama za juu katika Lexical Resource.
Step 6
Jibu la Mfano
Jisajili bila malipo ili usome jibu kamili la mfano kwa mada hii.
Jisajili ili Usome Jibu la MfanoMazoezi kwenye Karatasi
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