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Discussionacademic·2018

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Step 1

考官针对本话题的评分要点

1

For this discussion essay, dedicate one full body paragraph to thoroughly exploring the view that increasing sports facilities improves public health. Follow this with a separate, distinct body paragraph that fully discusses the opposing view, explaining why facilities might have little effect and what other measures are needed. Your personal opinion should then be clearly stated and supported in the conclusion, synthesizing the arguments from both preceding paragraphs rather than being too one-sided in the main discussion.

2

When discussing the benefits of sports facilities, you could mention how accessible public gyms or green spaces, like those promoted in Singapore's 'ActiveSG' initiative, can combat sedentary lifestyles and improve mental well-being. Conversely, when arguing for other measures, consider issues like poor dietary habits, the prevalence of smoking, or the impact of environmental pollution, suggesting that educational campaigns or stricter regulations on unhealthy foods might be more effective, as seen in some Scandinavian countries' public health campaigns.

3

The most common mistake students make on this specific question is failing to adequately develop the 'other measures' side of the argument. They often list a few alternatives without explaining *why* these might be more effective than sports facilities, or *why* sports facilities alone would have little effect. To avoid this, explicitly state the limitations of facilities (e.g., they don't address root causes of poor diet, or access issues for time-poor individuals) before introducing and elaborating on the necessity of other, complementary interventions.

4

To effectively transition between the two opposing views, employ clear linking phrases. For instance, after discussing the benefits of sports facilities, you could transition with 'However, a contrasting perspective posits that...' or 'While the aforementioned arguments highlight the potential of sports infrastructure, it is also crucial to consider that...'. In your conclusion, use phrases like 'Having considered both viewpoints, I am inclined to believe that...' or 'Ultimately, a balanced approach is imperative...'.

5

For a band 8-9 answer to this question, examiners look for a nuanced discussion that acknowledges the complexity of public health improvement, rather than presenting a simplistic 'either/or' argument. You must demonstrate sophisticated reasoning by exploring the underlying assumptions of each view, providing well-developed arguments with specific, relevant examples, and presenting a coherent, well-supported personal opinion that synthesizes the discussion, showing a deep understanding of the topic and the interplay of various factors.

Step 2

推荐的文章结构(25+分标准)

1
引言

通过公正呈现双方观点并确立自身立场来展现掌控力。

  • 展示对两种视角的理解——这体现批判性思维
  • 说明你倾向于哪一方——即使你在平等讨论双方
  • 保持中立、客观的语气——避免情绪化语言或偏见

task 各段落万能开头句

There are differing opinions on whether...While some people believe that..., others argue that...This essay will examine both perspectives before reaching a conclusion.
2
主体段落1——第一种观点

以尊重和可信的方式呈现一方观点。

  • 即使你不同意,也要用真实例子如实呈现这一观点
  • 使用客观的转述语言:'研究表明...'、'数据显示...'、'专家认为...'
  • 承认其优点——这体现平衡分析并赢得分数

task 各段落万能开头句

On the one hand, supporters of this view argue that...Those in favour point out that...A key argument for this position is...
3
主体段落2——对立观点

以同等深度和复杂度呈现反方观点。

  • 匹配第一段的结构与深度——考官会对比两者
  • 使用对比性过渡词:'相反地'、'相比之下'、'另一方面'
  • 如果你有个人观点,让此段落稍强一些——但保持公正

task 各段落万能开头句

On the other hand, critics contend that...However, there is a strong counter-argument...Conversely, many people feel that...
4
结论

综合双方观点并给出你的决定性判断。

  • 承认双方观点的合理性——这体现思维成熟度
  • 清晰自信地陈述你的倾向——不要含糊其辞
  • 采取坚定立场——考官更青睐清晰而非模棱两可

task 各段落万能开头句

In conclusion, while both sides have merit, I believe that...Having considered both arguments, it seems that...

Step 3

高分词汇与搭配

sedentary lifestyleA lifestyle characterized by much sitting and little physical activity.
preventive healthcareMeasures taken to prevent diseases rather than cure them.
public health initiativesOrganized efforts by governments or organizations to improve the health of a community.
it is widely acknowledged thatA common phrase to introduce a generally accepted fact or belief.
a compelling argument can be madeIndicates a strong and persuasive point.
this notion is predicated onImplies that an idea or argument is based on a particular assumption.
from my perspectiveIntroduces a personal opinion.
the evidence overwhelmingly suggestsIndicates strong support for a particular conclusion.
notwithstandingDespite; in spite of.
it could be argued thatIntroduces a point that is open to debate or a potential argument.

Step 4

Academic Phrases for This Essay Type

It is widely acknowledged thatThere is compelling evidence to suggestThis phenomenon can be attributed toA growing body of research indicatesThe implications of this are far-reachingThis raises important questions aboutFrom a broader perspectiveIt would be short-sighted to ignore

补充

MoreoverFurthermoreIn additionWhat is more

对比

HoweverNeverthelessOn the other handConversely

因果

ConsequentlyAs a resultThereforeThis leads to

举例

For instanceTo illustrateA case in point isSuch as

让步

AlthoughWhile it is true thatDespiteAdmittedly

Step 5

Grammar Patterns for Band 7+

含让步关系的复合句

Although some argue that technology isolates people, the evidence suggests it strengthens connections.

展现高级语法掌控力。以「虽然name」+相反观点开头,再陈述你的立场——体现细致入微的思考。

条件句(第二类)

If governments invested more in public transport, traffic congestion would decrease significantly.

非常适合假设情景和解决方案。结构:「If + 过去式,would + 动词原形」——展现灵活性和想象力。

使用被动语态以name语气

It is often argued that education should be free. However, this view overlooks the practical challenges.

name name倾向使用被动结构。「It is + 过去分词 + that」能营造权威、客观的语气。

关系从句

Students who study abroad, which is becoming increasingly common, tend to develop greater independence.

在不增加复杂度的前提下提升句子精密度。对人用「who」,对物用「which」,两者皆可用「that」。

名词短语增加信息密度

The rapid expansion of urban areas has led to increased pollution levels.

用更少的词承载更多信息。「有效政策的实施」对比「政策被有效实施」——提升name分数。

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